RubyFruitJungles

First Impression: I really like the title. It's a reoccurring sentence in the story and it relates to the story very well. 

This is a very well written story, and I really like it! You have a great range of vocabulary, which just makes the story more interesting and intriguing. You also have amazing descriptions, so everyone really knows what you are talking about, especially when you are describing the abuse that Nico goes through. It really opens light to a very dark and important situation that happens to a lot of people in this world, and you've described the pain, the confusion, the hurt perfectly. I can really feel what Nico is feeling, and this causes me to feel a deeper connection with Nico. You have great character development, especially since I feel that I know who Nico is. Not just his appearance, but who he truly is. You also do a great job portraying Nico's fear, such as flinching away, etc. because this makes the whole situation more realistic, and the reader really understands Nico's situation this way. There are some minor spelling errors, but those can be fixed easily. Also, make sure to stay in the same verb tense when talking about the same situation. I also like how you give insight on both Nico and Mr. Anderson's point of view. It broadens what the reader knows. Great work!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :) 

- bluecrayonlady