alan71

First Impression: No words on the cover?

So this is definitely a, for lack of better words, interesting story, and you have a lot of detail inside, which causes it to be very gruesome. In the first chapter, you could put more details about the setting and everything, because for most of the book, I'm confused. I have no idea where the main character is, who he is, and what he's doing. There's no character development, or any description on the personality of the character. The second and last chapter is definitely terrifying, and the details there are enough. There are some spelling and grammar errors, but those can be fixed through editing. To be honest, I was very confused throughout the whole story. 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

- bluecrayonlady