MeeHatesYoouu

First Impression: Awesome cover! It's perfect for the story :) 

Since you only have the prologue, this will probably be short. I love your writing style. Everything in your story flows perfectly, and I understand everything. How did you even come up with this plot?? This is definitely the most unique plot I've ever seen! It's a great story line, and I think that it will become a great story. Not to mention a relationship might blossom between Eros and the Hoodie Girl! Great job on staying in the same tense throughout! Also, I found this prologue kind of funny, because there was a crazy ex-girlfriend. Even though she's holding a knife, and there's blood everywhere, it's kind of funny how this whole situation plays out, so awesome job! One thing I noticed was that you said that when the ex-girlfriend was at his door, he ran out the door. But wouldn't this be impossible, since the ex-girlfriend is standing in his doorway? I don't know if that makes sense, but yeah. Overall, I love this start, and I'm sure this will be a great story! 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of these suggestions, feel free to ignore them :) 

- bluecrayonlady