LittleLightningGirl

First Impression: Loving the cover! 

I love the idea of this story. I've always thought that these conversation books were really cute. Your writing style is great, and each chapter is short, which makes it easy to read. One main thing is that I don't know where the story is headed. I know that each chapter has a conversation between this girl and this boy, but how long will the conversation go? How are they even exchanging notes through one notebook? Some parts of the story are a little confusing, which leaves me wondering what is going on. It does add to the mysterious part of the story, especially about her past, but I would like to know more about the setting and the characters. For example, where is she writing these notes? Where is this boy that she is talking to? In your description, you tell us that the girl suffers from OCD, and the boy is cocky, but I would love to have more description of the characters' personalities. Based on what I read of the boy's notes, he doesn't sound very cocky. I would love to know more about the girl and what kind of person she is. I found some grammar and spelling mistakes, but those can be easily fixed. Also make sure to watch your verb tense. Overall, great work! 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be. If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, feel free to ignore them :) 

- blucrayonlady