Paeoniax

First Impression: nice cover!

You have a strong prologue, and it really leaves a lasting impression on the reader. You have amazing descriptions, especially when describing the woman that hung herself. There's also great imagery for me to picture everything in my mind. I like your character development that is shown through the change in point of views, although the excessive change is kind of confusing. I could really feel Bree's pain in the scene where she is getting beaten by her step-father. Your summary isn't very detailed or descriptive, and doesn't really "hook" the reader in. Remember that the summary should be intriguing so a reader will start reading your story. Also, there are some minor errors like spelling and grammar that need to be fixed when editing. I don't really get much background information on how this wolf/mate thing works, which leaves me kind of confused. Everything happens so fast; first their classmates, and then all of sudden we find out they are mates, and then all of a sudden, we jump to all this crying, blood, and then shopping. There are many awkward transitions that are choppy, and just don't make sense. Also, how does he know for sure that Bree is his mate? This ties into the background information, again, because I should be told this information for me to understand your story fully. The major thing that I suggest fixing is how everything moves too fast, and it's like a whirlwind of ideas mashed together. 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be. If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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