Author: carniebratjas1

Genre: fanfiction

What I liked:

You gender binaries and branched out which is nice to see.

This seemed like a fun fanfic for heavy metal fans and the like it's full of alike people and plenty of celebrities.

What I didn't like:

There's a lot of "I do this...", "they did that..." going on, I think you could diversify your sentences a bit more as to not make the text as tedious.

Three chapters in and there wasn't any indication as to what the plot was supposed to be. There was no character development or story arc visible.

There were a few issues with capitalisation either being missing or in the wrong place but it wasn't too common.

Listing exactly what the character is wearing every day isn't always necessary, you should only try to mention striking pieces or plot-important items unless you just weave the items within your text instead.

Overall:

Not my thing, but I think if there was a plot I probably would've given this a higher score. 5/10.