Author: AwesomeA4Life

Genre: Romance/ Young Adult

What I liked:

You wrote the prologue extremely well and for a change, it did its job. You managed to explain the history of what happened without info-dumping. It felt like something a narrator would read out in the opening credits of a film.

The concept of an old society going to the future to escape something devastating to find out they can now gain special powers is something I haven't seen done before and you introduced it well.

What I didn't like:

Literally every paragraph after the prologue starts with "I" and it is infuriating when you compare it with the prologue. Starting with a verb or even just a name can greatly reduce this.

This story seems like it has too much going for it to warrant it having cliche characters like Derek behaving like a high school jock and the bitchy rich girl trope portrayed by Chloe. The story doesn't need that.

Chapter 4 wasn't as impactful as it should've been. The departure between MC and Yesenia is far too brief and there's not enough expression of emotion from either of them. Clove is way too chill to say she woke up somewhere new and unfamiliar away from family and friends.

I was a little confused about the concept of them getting their powers? By the sounds of it, technically anyone could be a royal if they had the correct aura? Were there royal bloodlines? Hopefully, you'll go more into depth with this later on (unless I completely overlooked it).

There's a lot of words, but honestly not much happens in total, I sort of feel like she gets her powers too early into the story. More world-building and introduction to more characters could've been done.

Overall:

Was kind of a drag to read, a shame for such a compelling concept. Too much "I" repetition which really made it even worse. 5/10.