Author: Sakschi
Genre: Chicklit

What I liked:

The premise of the story was interesting: meeting on a dating app and going on a holiday with what turns out to be her ex-lover.

Although it was a fanfic, it didn't seem like it.

The way you let the reader know how the main character was feeling about different situations that arose remained consistent throughout. 

What I didn't like:

I really wasn't a fan of you throwing in the questionnaire into the first chapter, it threw me right off. I also was not a fan of all the graphics you litter around the first chapter, it disrupts the flow. I really think you could do without them. Use your words for greater impact.

There were also quite a few spelling and grammatical errors immediately in the first and second paragraphs after said questionnaire. There was a time in chapter two you put "two" instead of "to". Grammarly is free and it'll help with rectifying these small issues in the future if you decide to edit your work. 

I couldn't quite get a sense of who Ariel was, and what her personality was like when it didn't revolve around Chris. She seemed quite generic, unfortunately. I think you could develop her personality a bit more, maybe a little something in the prologue would help.

The rate at which Ariel goes from despising Chris to loving him again felt too rushed for me personally also. You could flesh out their relationship a bit more, give them more time 

Overall:

I found it to be rather plain feeling, with a lack of environmental descriptions and it doesn't seem very memorable to me. Saying that I feel like it would suit a certain group of young readers who enjoy these kins of reads.

I'll give this a 3/10