#1 jackrichardjones

Cover (10/10)

The cover is perfect, I'd say it's appropriate for the story, and the use of colors it's well done, you can see the title and author very clearly.

Title (9/10)

The title is nice and original, I think it can use some work, it's not captivating enough for the type of book.

Plot (8/10)

Since the story is not finished, I can't really get too deep on the plot, but from what I've read the plot is interesting, there isn't really a lot of books like this and the idea of it is very new and different, but the story is lacking a lot of details.

Characters (5/10)

From the chapters I read the characters aren't really something that stands out, characters are what give the story life, so if your characters aren't interesting or you don't focus on them enough the book becomes boring to the readers.

Spelling and Grammar (6/10)

It could've been much better, it wasn't to the point of where it was hard to read, but it does make the reading uncomfortable.

The story itself is written very poorly, and the lack of good grammar and spelling makes it worse. There is a lot of punctuation errors and spelling mistakes, I recommend to find an editor if you struggle with this aspects.

Structure (6/10)

The structure is not consistent, you jump from present tense to past tense a couple of times, it was confusing. I recommend reviewing the chapters and make the structure easier for your readers.

Overall

7.3/10

I think the story is very promising, I would definitely continue reading if those mistakes were fixed.

Thank you for asking a review, I hope this was helpful!

-V