Reviewer: cutie_pixie123

Author: DaretoDreaminShadow

Genre: Teen Fiction

Cover : 10/10

The cover of the story is superb and very catching. The shattered glass with the girl behind it really gives a dark look to it.

Title : 9/10

I am really not sure, because it's just one update and from what I read, I really feel that the title can be a little better. Like something that relates to a darker plot of the story, maybe.

Also, the description of the story is good, but my advice is to keep it a little short and not very much informative because you want the readers to feel intrigued and get into the story to know what it is all about.

Characterization : 10/10

I like the character of Lyla Edwards to be a passionate singer who is trying to run away from her past that left behind deep scars on her mind,even to the extent that she is ready to be a part of the music industry that has nothing else, but fake showcasing.
Her description potrays her fear towards the past, very well. Also the strict behavior of the manager Jeremy, gives me the idea of how she is ill treated in music industry. Last but not the least, the mention of her grandfather, about when she saw him the last time in her hospitalized condition clearly indicates that he has a negative character.

Creativity:

I'm not sure because because the introduction of the story is not enough to give the whole idea... But still I'll say that that the idea of the introduction is very cool and intriguing... It gives you the thriller vibes.

Media /graphics:

There is not much in there... So not sure

Short review—>

The story is very well written and each character in the intro is also described thoroughly. But I personally feel that the description gets too much at some places, making the readers a bit confused. So my small advice is to make it more straight to the point and a bit shorter, if possible.

Because a short and less informative intro will force the readers to read the next parts in order to solve the mystery.

I won't give a total score because it's just one chapter of the story. All I will say is that you did a great job and I hope that my review is not too harsh or rude. Hope it helps :)