Genre: Teen Fiction

Summary: One message can change everything.

In which Jaye and Kyle, estranged friends, reconnect using the anonymity of the Internet.

+Cover:

I like your cover. It is simple yet it represents the story. Most people may not be attracted by such a cover but for me these kind of simple covers hold more allure than flashy ones. So good job on that!

Rating: 8.5/10

+Title

I get what you meant. It is clearly explained in the extended summary so I have to commend you on your thoughtfulness.

Rating: 8/10

+Summary

Simple and to the point. Just like how the story is.

Rating: 7.5/10

+ Plot

Not an idea I have seen before. Well, at least not in the form you have written it in. Most of them have a bucketload of drama in it with long, winding chapters.

So this is a refreshing read.

Rating: 6/10

+Characters

Jaye: The problem about having only dialogue conversations are that you don't actually know the personalities of the people. She has been hurt by her best friend and the rumours have driven her other friends and peers away from her.

Kyle: He is an a**- hole. Yes, I know people make mistakes and deserve second chances but things like this are very hard to forgive. Maybe ove time it may become forgivable but the scars will still remain. After all, if it's your friend who hands the enemy a dagger to stab you in the back, who can you count on? Yes, I feel quite strongly about that. So sorry but then he is not my most favourite character.

Ella: To be honest, I am rather curious about her and I hope you show more of her in thr later chapters. Even if she is a conniving bimbo.

Rating: 7.5/10

+Chapters:

Length: Too short but given the format of the story I guess that is unavoidable. So no problem with that.

Grammar, Punctuation, Sentence Structure: No major mistakes.

General:

I generally don't tend to read dialogue oriented stories like this. I just can't feel the connection with the characters in these of kind if stories. Of course, that is a personal opinion and doesn't reflect on how your story is.

I loved the realism of the emotions that Jaye felt. It seemed so close to as how someone would feel. It would be even more devastating if you show their previous moments and then the present where they ignore each other.

I am looking forward to when they find out who they been texting and then watch the drama unfold.

On that note, I am also interested in Ella. There has only been slight mentions of her and everything points to her being a bit**. So I am curious to find out more about her.

I would advice you to slowly start revealing them to each other or maybe make their online interactions a bit more personal so the readers can feel their connection.

That is all I can say about this since it is a short story.

+ Conclusion

While I personally am not invested in these kind of stories, I am sure that it would be a lovely read for someone who likes stories that have mostly dialogues in them.

+ Overall Rating

7/10