Genre: Science Fiction

Summary: Lisa and 24 other kids from her quiet neighbourhood are forced to leave their homes when a lethal epidemic spreads worldwide. The thing was, none of them knew what was going on.

After training like military men for weeks, they were finally set free to see what had happened to the rest of the world while they were safe. They had no idea about the destroyed the cities or how dangerous the people were either. But worst of all, the flesh eating creatures that arose with the virus.

Will these kids be able to handle the pressure, hardship, and stress of the new world?

+ Cover

I do like the cover though it looks more like a Mafia kind of story.

Rating: 7/10

+ Title

You made a slight change to Darwin's principle :D But the title is kind of fitting.

But it didn't attract me towards the story unfortunately.

Rating: 7/10

+ Summary

Not bad but can be a lot better.

Lisa, along with 24 other kids are carted off to a camp where they receive training to help them survive the fast spreading Infection.

With no explanations and a lot of questions, they complete their training successfully, only to be released into the New World.

With no answers to their questions and a newly developed skill set, will they be able to face the world?

Something along those lines. Short and compact, without giving anything much away to capture the interest of readers.

Rating: 6/10

+ Plot

Over-used but then I find most of the Zombie stories plots over used. I guess you can't vary too much with it.

Rating: 6/10

+ Characters

Lisa is still a child (just turned teen) so the way she talks seems a bit out of character. The way she snaps back at the Medic after jumping from the roof is one example.

As far as the others go, you haven't really given any insight to them so I really can't comment upon any of them.

Rating: 6/10

+ Chapters

Length: Not too bad.

Grammar, etc: Few mistakes which I have pointed out but overall not bad.

General:

What's up with the explanation that Mark gives? It confused me. He says that 'the infection you haven't heard about'. So they don't know about the infection? And what about the parents? He says 'they don't know'. About what? The camp? I would advise you to clear up the explanation part.

Other than that, they seem to be almost too calm, don't you think? They have been taken away from their parents with no proper explanation, made to use guns and knives and get none of them react in any way? If I was there I would have been scared or maybe bawling or maybe just stomping around demanding answers.

Even if they were confused, at least the small kids would be crying for their parents.

Who is Hannah? As I said before, if you introduce all the characters in bulk, its easier to get confused between them.

Normally zombie stories like this have a protagonist who is a bit more older so that is a nice change that you made.

+ Conclusion

It is still a bit raw but the it has a lot of potential. A bit of editing and it would be an amazing read!

+ Overall Rating

6.5/10