Genre: Science fiction

Summary: "His voice shows no sympathy. No care, or feelings. I am frozen in disbelief as I hear his words. 9 months...I waited 9 months for my child...and it's gone? I block out the other voices as I stay there frozen willing the tears in my eyes to go away. I suddenly see a cot roll up to my bed, and I cautiously move my head to the side to view the small cot stationed by my side.

The feeling inside me breaks me apart. I claw at my chest willing the oxygen to go down, for the pain in my chest to leave me isolated, and just for world to end me. I firmly place my hands on the plastic cover of the cot, and I scream silently as the fresh tears cascade down my face. He can't be gone...he can't be...."

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Evelyn's society defines perfection. But sometimes, perfection is poison, and sometimes there is a price to pay for such perfection...

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Evelyn is an innocent 15 year old....too young to bear the feeling of loss, or tragedy. After her 10 month procedure welcoming her into adulthood--Evelyn has many questions, and no answers. 10 months of her life are stolen from her, and she is only left with a scar on her lower belly. Its only by chance that she stumbles upon an insignificant room, in an insignificant building, leading her to the very essence of her society; lies. Evelyn has only one chance to get this right. In a dystopian society choice is not a right, nor a privilege. The reconcilement control every moment of Evelyn's life, but this is her chance to fight back. But every time she comes closer to the truth, the reconcilement are one step further. Evelyn finds herself in a maze with no end. When her last flicker of hope fades and she believes its the end-- it really is only the beginning. Let the Mind Games begin...

+ Cover

I like it. There may be better covers for this book though this one isn't bad.

Rating: 7.5/10

+ Title

Well, the title kind of gives a mysterious vibe and I do agree with it. But I have doubts on how is it 'mind games'.

Rating: 7/10

+ Summary

It's a bit too long and I think its gives a bit to much away. You can shorten the excerpt and keep most of thr later part of the summary. Maybe something like:

There is no sympathy in his voice and his icy blue eyes- so unlike the azure irises that would never get the chance to see the world- stare at me coldly. I try to scream but no sound comes out.

After nine months.... Nine months.... And this is how it ends?

This is more than enough for the excerpt. It should have a bit of vagueness.

Rating: 5/10

+ Plot

Sci-Fi plots are always interesting. I am not sure of what the plot is about exactly.

Rating: 7/10

+ Chapters

Okay, so my main concern about the story is the vagueness. There are no descriptions of anything and the pace is set a bit too fast. There are a few grammatical mistakes scattered around the story.

The story by itself has a lot of potential and it has an element of mystery that will keep the readers attached to it.

The only advise I would give you is to slow the pace down and give more descriptions. How the MC looks, the place around her, etc. Why did she get the job if she is only 15 years old? Where are her parents? Why did she run from whoever was behind her without any concrete reason?

There are a lot of questions and no answers. While normally this would be applauded, it should be done for the parts thats actually mysterious. Her appearance and all is not included in that.

And you need to explore her character more. I haven't been able to get a feel on her character at all since there is literally nothing that stands out about her. No habits, no quirks, nothing.

Other than that, the story is a nice read and has. Slot of potential. Expand on the characters and it would be a great read.

+ Conclusion

An interesting story to read for an sci-fi fans especially with the element of mystery. Improve the characters and it would be even better.

+ Overall Rating

6.5/10