Genre: Fantasy

Summary: They say that we should be careful about what we wish for, but they hadn't wished for anything at all. They were happy leading a normal life, although little did they know that things were slowly seeping into their so called reality. Rhythm Dannel and Haley Brant find out much more about themselves than they ever wanted to. The wheels of fate had started to turn when they entered Virum Volitare academy. themselves than they ever wanted to. The wheels of fate had started to turn when they entered Virum Volitare academy.

+ Cover

It is simple yet elegant.

Rating: 9/10

+ Title

Have no idea how it ties to the story yet. But it relates to the cover very well.

Rating: 9/10

+ Summary

I like how short it is. It says enough for the reader to be interested yet leaves out enough for them to be curious enough to read the book.

Rating: 8/10

+ Plot

School for specially gifted. Definitely not something new. What I do like is the fact that you managed to keep an aura of mystery by not reveal exactly how they ended up there.

Rating: 7.5/10

+Characters

Rhythm: She is a hot headed girl who acts before thinking. I do like those characters but you have to be careful, they shouldn't be overdone or they would come across as bratty.

Hayley: I am not too fond of the quiet characters. I find them boring. That is, of course, my personal opinion and nothing having to do with your character. But I would have been more entertained if she were sassy even though quiet. It would have provided a lot of entertainment.

Rating: 8/10

+ Chapters

Length: They may be on the longer side but I have no complaints.

Grammar, etc: Nothing jumps out at me immediately so good job!

General:

You did an amazing job adding the prophetic poem in the start. It catches the attention immediately and makes the reader want to read more.

To be honest, I found the narrative to be a bit.... Awkward. I can't exactly point out that how but it sounded robotic. Maybe it's the fact that you told but did not show.

When I read a story about 'special' schools, I like a bit of a personal touch to it that was missing in this story. The emotions were not conveyed to its full extent and tbe writing seemed to lack that spark.

I would advise you to try writing in first P.O.V, just for practise, before trying to wrote the chapters so you can have an idea of how the characters would react based on what they are feeling.

The characters may have reacted as they would have but unfortunately, their reactions have not been conveyed properly.

Other than that, I found your book to be quite good. There was nearly no grammatical errors and it is quite pleasant to read.

Intriguing too so that is nice.

+ Conclusion

It is a very nicely written story with top- notch grammar and intriguing plot. Definitely recommended!

+ Overall Rating

8.5/10