Genre: Teen Fiction

Summary: This is Dawson's story. She was your pretty typical teenager, who always had a grin tattooed permanently on her face. She had a passion for helping others when they were in need.

Something happened at the start of the year 2015, that change Dawson's life forever. Now, you need to understand she had an extremely normal, happy upbringing but then someone who is supposed to love, cherish and protect her from harm did the complete opposite, making her whole life flip upside down.

Who does that?

It's been a little over a year now, she's moved with her mum and baby brother Leo to Richburg, a small town. Watch as she struggles but then grows. With the help of her new best friend and see if she is able to overcomes the obstacles put in front of her.

What would you do in that situation, would you be like Dawson, why don't you find out?

+ Cover

I like it. It's simple and portrays the kind of story you are writing. That is about a girl who is learning to live again. It suits the kind of melancholy mood of the story. So good job on that. Though you can still try to acquire a new one; who knows? You may find something better.

Rating: 6.5/10

+ Title

To be honest, it doesn't suit the story at all. It has no connection to it and sounds more like a story about love triangles. It won't hook in the readers. There are a lot of alternate titles you could use like 'The Art of Living', 'Turning the Corner', etc that would sound more appealing and can even be related to the story.

Rating: 4.5/10

+Summary

It is alright though it would be better if you amend the end. It feels like too much information. Maybe you can just end it by saying 'Accompany her as she learns to live once again' or something similarly simple after the first two paragraphs.

But it isn't bad and it hooks the readers. I know I was interested to find out just how you took this particular plot to it's conclusion.

Rating: 7.5/ 10

+Plot

It is not completely original; I have seen plots like this before but you are making it your own as the story progresses so it is good.

There is nothing much to say about it.

Rating: 8/10

+Characters

Your main character is a typical girl with her own fair share of troubles. There is nothing much I have to say about her.

I like how her relationship with her mother is portrayed; easy going and loving. Her father is more of a two-dimensional character unfortunately. Maybe that is because we have seen him only in the start of the story. If you would have added in some family memories before showing the bad side of him the readers would be more horrified.

I like Taylor and half expected him to be the main character. But you surprised me there. At least you didn't make it predictable.

The characters aren't too remarkable but then this is set in a normal world not a fantasy one so it is quite normal.

Rating: 7/10

+Chapters

Length: It is short and that is a good thing in such books since you need to make the people feel what the characters are going through and that is easier to do when you have shorter chapters.

Grammar, Sentence Structure: I noticed that descriptive sentences are your weakness. The starting sentence of the story seems a bit robotic. You are telling the people but not showing them.

On the other hand, you portray the characters emotions and feelings very well. My favourite part was in the prologue when you explained how the mother seemed to give up through the eyes of her daughter.

As far as grammar goes, there are a few unnecessary punctuation scattered throughout the story. It isn't anything major but if you want the story to flow more smoothly I will recommend that you recheck your story and clear those out. In Chapter Three, you describe how her mother looks. That whole paragraph should be rechecked since I can see only commas in the whole paragraph. You need to put some full stops are break it off.

There are also a few typos (eg; In chapter 5, it says passed instead of past) so go through it once again.

General: Your chapters flow nicely as isn't too fast or slow paced so there is no problem there. But the main, glaring problem I found was that at the start of the Prologue you say '8 months later'. It isn't required. You can just write the date and in the next chapter put a caption 'Eight Months Earlier'. So in Chapter Two, you don't need to write 'Eight Months Later' again. It looks tacky.

The chapters get a bit fast paced later so try to slow them down. (like the part about egging his house can be elaborated and made more better)

+ Conclusion

It starts out a bit angsty but it is a story about a girl learning to live her life once again and bury the horrors of her past. A bit of editing and it would be a good read.

+Overall Rating

7/10