Name: Bill X Reader
Type: (Fanfiction) Gravity Falls
Author: missmckenna2027
Status: Incomplete

Description: I've lived in Gravity Falls for three years now. I've noticed some abnormalities around here, not gonna lie. Well, there's a boy, who is a year older than me, but he still calls me kid. His name is Bill. Bill Cipher.

Review: I do not watch Gravity Falls, so I don't know who Bill is. But. He seems like an interesting character. I usually see very few 2nd person stories, so I'll give you props on trying that out. 2nd Person is also sort of hard, you do not know what your reader is like, so you cannot express them as well to Bill. We will see how the story progresses, as it is only three chapters. As for grammar and punctuation? I didn't see many. Lengthwise, it's good, but could be longer. Leave spaces between paragraphs, I can observe, that you only leave spacing when the scene changes. No. Don't. Put hyphens or something else more fitting when the scene changes and leave spaces between paragraphs, like so:

"This might be your sad little demise, no one to save you now...sister," Serenity said, as she pulled out a knife from inside her cloak.

"No, no...sister! Please..." It was no use, Crystals pleas fell upon deaf ears...

"I am...sorry..."

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(And then here, the next scene)

Do it like this.

Rating: 3 / 5