Author: lily97000

Reviewer: Shivani_SwaSan

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Cover :

A sweet and simple cover. I love the font used and I also loved the way the word 'Love' was highlighted in your cover. But still I feel like the cover could have been more interesting. Maybe something like a slight dark theme in the background of your cover would put more shade on the emotions of your main characters. But still, it's simple and sweet. Credit goes to the lovely editor!

PS : Honestly when I went through your covers page, I found the last cover most relevant for your book. Just a suggestion from my side, though. ❤

Title :

'Half Hope, Half Love' -- it's totally apt for your story and was indeed an eye catching title. It made me generate my own assumptions regarding the story, which excited me further to read the story to see if any of my ideas turned out to be true. You've chosen a creative title for your story. Keep it up dear.

Plot/Storyline :

You've chosen to write on a plot which is indeed rare and that has the capacity of keeping the readers hooked to your story, especially the words you wrote in your blurb and epigraph. Even though it has simple love triangle plot but it still has it's own essence. So, KUDOS to you for an interesting plot, dear!

Lovely trailer and it totally suits your plot. However, I would suggest you to put it before all the chapters and not after. ❤

Your epigraph was something that connected me instantly to the story and it made me want to read further. I've read all six chapters of your story : Amazing storyline! You have carried your storyline very well as per your plot.

Emotions were on top and also the melancholy! Characterization was splendid -- especially Hazel's. Her unsaid feelings for Heath was something that was the central point of your story. Honestly I really disliked Heath at some places for not being able to realise Hazel's love for him and instead used her to get her sister. Or maybe he did, but he couldn't understand if he felt something for Hazel also or not. That's the keypoint, you made me feel something for your characters and it doesn't matter if it is love or hate, because you have that power of hooking someone strongly to your story through the emotions you have portrayed in here. Needless to say Hazel was the centre of attention of your story for me -- in the six chapters. I absolutely loved her and at the same time I felt very deeply for her.

The way you expressed her thoughts, it was beautiful and very smooth. Readers can easily get connected to your story.

Other than that, amazing work on Hazel-Heath scenes. Kiara's character is still a mystery for me, though, which is a good thing. You left me wonder what will happen further.

The fifth and sixth chapters were crucial.

Grammar :

As I already said, your writing is very smooth. And so is your grammar. Splendid work on grammar that is simple, proper and smooth. Sentence construction, dialogue delivery, punctuations, everything was proper. Just some silly typos which are almost negligible, and can be corrected with one proof reading. Otherwise you have a good grip on grammar. Keep it up dear.

One more thing, please make sure you separate your chapters from your author notes not by the different fonts, but maybe a series of hyphens or something like ' ----- '.

Fascination :

I was highly fascinated by the plot and characterization. ❤

You have the power to hook readers strongly to your story. So you have succeeded in the fascination factor of your story. Not to mention the way you have portrayed your scenes by sprinkling some humor, a few romantic scenes, or display of feelings -- it was outstanding.

Overall :

A lovely piece of work. Scenes are portrayed nicely. Characterization is splendid. Emotions are on peak and so are the feelings. Just a bit more work on cover is needed to make it perfect and make the story more intriguing. And I wish you all the best for your future journey ❤

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