Author: Barneybear123

Reviewed by: Miss_WordDreamer

Chapters Read: 18

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Cover

Altough your cover is beautiful, amazing editing has been done and choice of pictures is also good, All in all the editor has done a good job. But the colours could have been a little better, because from whatever I have read the story seems to be very lighthearted and happy. You can send me the cover and I'll tell what I am trying to say.

Another problem in the cover is that it has a flower and clock kind of think on the right bottom, which makes no sense. No scene related to that is shown in the story. And I believe that the cover has a story of it's own, seeing it one should get the know-how of the story. So the things present on the cover matters alot.

Title

I LOVE LONG TITLES!! Although I very much know that nowadays small titles are more in trend but I have a soft corner for long ones. I believe that long titles have an essence of their own.

Another thing is that the title totally goes with the story, because in the story you have shown about two contrasting people and their contrasting views about marriage. One wants to have an ideal fairytale love story while the other one is completely against it. One is a really serious character with a little bit of babyish touch hidden somewhere beneath whereas the other is this happy go lucky, flirty person.

Blurb

Blurp was nothing special, it was quite simple. I mean as a reader it didn't hook me to the story, what developed my interest in the story was the prologue that you gave in the start of the story. That could have made a better prologue with a little editing.

Because the Blurp is something that caters the audiance, it is like the first thing that someone looks after before reading a story.

Another thing metioned in the story is the fire and ice thing. I don't thing it is appropriate over here. Like your story is not that intense where one can call the characters fire and ice. Because fire destroys ice where as the same way ice destroys fire. It is like fire and ice can never be one. And I really didn't get that feel from the story. But then every writer have an interpretation of their own and I would really like to know yours.

Plot

Plot is simple yet unique. The things like contrasting views on marriage and "opposites attract" thing is really common but generally it is like the boy is against marriage and all where as here the girl is against the idea of marriage that is quite unique. I even liked that she had a valid reason for the way she feels.

Storyline

So you started the book by giving a character sketch which I think is really not required. One should let the readers themself understand what the characters are about and what are their basic personality traits. All the things that you have mentioned in the characters can clearly be seen in the story, that's why it was not required.

The start of the story is really great, I really loved how the destiny made them meet. It was like everything was planned by someone up there. And then the transition to the time where the marriage proposal comes for Nandini was also a great idea, like without beating around the bush you went directly for the main thing. The scenes have been placed beautifully, basically I loved how you have presented the story.

Something that I wasn't able to digest was Nandini's age, me being a doctor's child knows it all about the medical field. It is like you have 5 years of MBBS, so by the time you end that you are 22. And then follows 3 years of specialisation which makes it 25 and here Nandini has been practicing for 4 years so that makes her 29. So there is no way that she can be 25.

Grammar

There were no mistakes as such in what ever I have read neither grammatical nor spellings. A few spelling mistakes here and there, but it really doesn't matter. One mistake that I can remember was in Alya's Introduction you can rectify that one.

Writing style

Your writing style is just like other writer, which I like. I mean the classic one, that is the dialogs are in double colloms and all.

But you have a habit of writing really long paragraphs, which are sometimes difficult to read.

Anyways that really doesn't matter that much.

Another thing is that you have added lots of pictures and gifs here and there in the story, which really break the flow of the story and is not really required.

Fascination

So generally it is like I can relate to one of the characters and eventually as the story proceed I develop the soft corner towards that person. But here I could relate to both from the prologue itself, which is a really great thing.

Overall

Overall the story is really beautiful, just small things that could be taken care of very easily.

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