Title: Men of Fate
Author:@Lady_Rhey
Genre: Short Story/One Shot
Position: Third Place
Reviewer: CrownedMadness

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The title is interesting. I think it works with the storyline, too. For example, a predetermined future awaits the MC — Cú Alter, who's destined to be a 'servant' and serve a 'master'.

Coming to the book cover, I think it serves the intended purpose and I liked the greyscale scheme with the line-art effect. The image used of a couple in an intimate position also hints about the storyline — possible romantic and sensual stories. I'd suggest scaling the font size up a bit since it is a bit difficult to read on mobile devices, especially the subtitle and author's name.

The blurb suggests that the book is a compilation of one shots (stand-alone as well as series) of an anime series, I believe.

As for a person who has no knowledge of this world, I found it hard to grasp some concepts. For example, what exactly is the relationship between a servant and a master? I would've liked it if you'd incorporated a brief explanation of the concept within the storytelling. But, for the aimed audience, I'm sure the references and plot were enjoyable to read.

The book opens with Cú Alter meeting his new master Rhey. The opening paragraph gives an instant impression of Cú's character. He's noble at the same time ruthless.

I liked how you had portrayed Cú's emotions. He's alien to human things (for example, swimming and bathing) and you've achieved to portray his dilemma and reactions rather well. There's some innocence to him, and a bluntness that comes with that adds a comical element to the story.

Moving onto Master Rhey, I felt she was lacking character-wise compared to Cú Alter. I would have also liked if you'd given some physical description on her for the readers to visualise. But, it's clear she's different from the masters Cú has served. She treats him like a person than a servant which seems to be an alien yet welcomed feeling to Cú.

The book needs some cleaning grammar-wise. There's a couple of typos and POV shifts here and there. I've also noticed you tend to use roleplay shorthand for actions (for example, *yawn*) and few made-up words (skoogying). I wouldn't advise using them in formal writing.

Another thing I felt is the stories could use a bit more depth. For example, the scene where Cú mentions that he doesn't need to eat, but he takes a bite anyway. Has he eaten food before? If not, what's his reaction to tasting food for the first time? I believe, these little details will add more life to the story.

But overall, your writing style is enjoyable and visualisable. Good job! Keep writing! 

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