There's not much I can say as everyone has their own opinion/writing style, and I don't want to force my opinion on anyone. Therefore, from a readers view:

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Many people have problems with commenting  which is fine. No one forces you to comment but if you vote it's a silent statement of 'hey author, thanks for the chapter, I really liked it!'

- pls pls pls make spaces between paragraphs! If you upload chapters where the sentences are in an entire block, it can be very, very difficult to read! And you may skip a line or land in another line. Here is an example:

Try this:

Jimin has been gathering herbs for the last few hours in the forest. The rays of the sun shine down on Jimin as his feet drag through the wet, brown and red coloured leaves scattered on the ground. This morning has been one of the quietest mornings since he became a healer in this pack. The day had started badly, he recalls, with grey clouds and only a few rays of sunshine that prickled on his skin.

His brown hair had fallen into his face as he soaks in the morning sun while leaning against the wall of his hut. He sighs at the sound of many, small raindrops hitting the ground, dropping his head back against the wall. There isn't anyone who needs his help, leaving him to work on the tasks he had set aside awhile ago.

Goosebumps rush up his exposed arms as a fresh autumn breeze brushes over his skin, making him shiver slightly. His fingers draw his clothes tighter around himself before he unscrews a glass jar. He keeps the berries to eat separated from the herbs in the brown little basket. Being a herbalist can certainly be a good and fulfilling profession, Jimin gets to tend to people in need. Once or twice he had wondered if he performed a miracle when a case seemed hopeless but then unexpectedly the person was cured. 

Jimin was raised by his grandparents, and both of them influenced him in their own way. His grandmother was the woman who taught him about the miscellaneous herbs and berries. She is  the anchor in his life, a person he can turn to when he needs help with something or just needs someone to be there for him. Jimin's grandfather, on the other hand, told him stories when Jimin was younger about what he experienced or how he and his grandmother met. 

His grandfather not only used to, but he still speaks with much wisdom and advice. After all, both of them are the ones who raised Jimin mostly on their own.

Instead of:

Jimin has been gathering herbs for the last few hours in the forest. The rays of the sun shine down on Jimin as his feet drag through the wet, brown and red coloured leaves scattered on the ground. This morning has been one of the quietest mornings since he became a healer in this pack. The day had started badly, he recalls, with grey clouds and only a few rays of sunshine that prickled on his skin. His brown hair had fallen into his face as he soaks in the morning sun while leaning against the wall of his hut. He sighs at the sound of many, small raindrops hitting the ground, dropping his head back against the wall. There isn't anyone who needs his help, leaving him to work on the tasks he had set aside awhile ago. Goosebumps rush up his exposed arms as a fresh autumn breeze brushes over his skin, making him shiver slightly. His fingers draw his clothes tighter around himself before he unscrews a glass jar. He keeps the berries to eat separated from the herbs in the brown little basket. Being a herbalist can certainly be a good and fulfilling profession, Jimin gets to tend to people in need. Once or twice, he had wondered if he performed a miracle when a case seemed hopeless but then unexpectedly, the person was cured. Jimin was raised by his grandparents, and both of them influenced him in their own way. His grandmother was the woman who taught him about the miscellaneous herbs and berries. She is  the anchor in his life, a person he can turn to when he needs help with something or just needs someone to be there for him. Jimin's grandfather, on the other hand, told him stories when Jimin was younger about what he experienced or how he and his grandmother met. His grandfather not only used to, but he still speaks with much wisdom and advice. After all, both of them are the ones who raised Jimin, mostly on their own.

Which is easier to read in your opinion?

-> it's also much easier to receive comments 💗

- don't put your story in centric as good as it may look... when reading, it's not pleasing at all 🙏🏻 some people have dyslexia and some are simply bothered by it as it breaks the reading flow if you put it for a book. It can be very exhausting for the eyes to read text in the middle.

Try this:

Jimin has been gathering herbs for the last few hours in the forest. The rays of the sun shine down on Jimin as his feet drag through the wet, brown and red coloured leaves scattered on the ground. This morning has been one of the quietest mornings since he became a healer in this pack. The day had started badly, he recalls, with grey clouds and only a few rays of sunshine that prickled on his skin.

His brown hair had fallen into his face as he soaks in the morning sun while leaning against the wall of his hut. He sighs at the sound of many, small raindrops hitting the ground, dropping his head back against the wall. There isn't anyone who needs his help, leaving him to work on the tasks he had set aside awhile ago.

Goosebumps rush up his exposed arms as a fresh autumn breeze brushes over his skin, making him shiver slightly. His fingers draw his clothes tighter around himself before he unscrews a glass jar. He keeps the berries to eat separated from the herbs in the brown little basket. Being a herbalist can certainly be a good and fulfilling profession, Jimin gets to tend to people in need. Once or twice he had wondered if he performed a miracle when a case seemed hopeless but then unexpectedly the person was cured. 

Jimin was raised by his grandparents, and both of them influenced him in their own way. His grandmother was the woman who taught him about the miscellaneous herbs and berries. She is  the anchor in his life, a person he can turn to when he needs help with something or just needs someone to be there for him. Jimin's grandfather, on the other hand, told him stories when Jimin was younger about what he experienced or how he and his grandmother met. 

His grandfather not only used to, but he still speaks with much wisdom and advice. After all, both of them are the ones who raised Jimin mostly on their own.

Instead of:

Jimin has been gathering herbs for the last few hours in the forest. The rays of the sun shine down on Jimin as his feet drag through the wet, brown and red coloured leaves scattered on the ground. This morning has been one of the quietest mornings since he became a healer in this pack. The day had started badly, he recalls, with grey clouds and only a few rays of sunshine that prickled on his skin.

His brown hair had fallen into his face as he soaks in the morning sun while leaning against the wall of his hut. He sighs at the sound of many, small raindrops hitting the ground, dropping his head back against the wall. There isn't anyone who needs his help, leaving him to work on the tasks he had set aside awhile ago.

Goosebumps rush up his exposed arms as a fresh autumn breeze brushes over his skin, making him shiver slightly. His fingers draw his clothes tighter around himself before he unscrews a glass jar. He keeps the berries to eat separated from the herbs in the brown little basket. Being a herbalist can certainly be a good and fulfilling profession, Jimin gets to tend to people in need. Once or twice he had wondered if he performed a miracle when a case seemed hopeless but then unexpectedly the person was cured. 

Jimin was raised by his grandparents, and both of them influenced him in their own way. His grandmother was the woman who taught him about the miscellaneous herbs and berries. She is  the anchor in his life, a person he can turn to when he needs help with something or just needs someone to be there for him. Jimin's grandfather, on the other hand, told him stories when Jimin was younger about what he experienced or how he and his grandmother met. 

His grandfather not only used to, but he still speaks with much wisdom and advice. After all, both of them are the ones who raised Jimin mostly on their own.

If you write in "I" pov make sure you don't switch too often povs 💗 I'm talking about these kind of povs:

Jk pov

[Writes a paragraphs]

Jm pov

[Write one sentence]

Jk pov

[Continues to write for the chapter]

Try to decide which pov you use for most of the scene or one scene or maybe consider switching to third pov? In third pov there are also different writing styles, some people solely focus on one person's pov in an entire book/chapter but some also switch them up with thoughts from the other person in that case it isn't as much obvious like in "I" pov ❤️

-> I do know that everyone has their preference in style and this is totally fine but if you see it from a readers perspective, it lets you lose focus and a reader may become annoyed by it easily 🙈

- try to avoid using male

Male = male gender

Use instead: man or brown-haired man/ the taller/the smaller man (male just sounds weird in this context)

- if you write in a paragraph through a person's eyes let's say jimin. Don't use other descriptions in the same paragraph apart from Jimin. It's like writing:

I am walking. The taller (me) goes up the mountain.

- try to avoid using words for which you don't know the meaning of

- since wp has lots of advertisements, I highly recommend 500-1k words in a chapter which is pretty good as a beginner author, you might write longer chapter the more experienced you get <3

- please always give credits. Be it a translation (ofc with permission), artwork or other kinds. Please use credits!

- putting pictures in the middle of texts can break the readers flow, be mindful of that