*My Thirteen Masks
by akachan94

(Hyra Demonise Fukushima, May 06, 2020)

https://www.wattpad.com/story/63769046

The more you beg for your life,
the more they want to kill you.

The more they saw you miserable,
the more you make them happy.

Killing is their game.

Death is their sign.

Blood is their favorite scent.

They changed when she came.
But they don't know behind that angelic beauty was a mysterious and a very dangerous girl.

She can be your worst enemy.

"I'm here to collect

MY THIRTEEN Masks." - Demon

-----ayusin sana ang pagkakasulat. Maganda 👍. Daming POVs, na pwede namang alisin or wala nalang yung point of views ng ilang characters.
Isa pa, daming typos at wrong grammars.
Daming capital letters, maglagay ng tuldok sa dapat paglagyan. Huwag gumamit ng lenggwaheng di alam kung tama ba ang pagkakasulat or angkop ang pangungusap. Hayaan mong maging malupit ako sa pananalita or komento ko ha, 😅😘✌️ (labyu). I checked on the second book of this story, a bit DISAPPOINTED with the synopsis (or description). Mali mali.  Meerte kese eke. (We went to school and study to learn. Don't waste the years on what our teachers been taught to us.)
May talento ka, huwag mong sayangin.

At di ko magets- walang katapusang pagbawi ng 13 masks.
Sumubra sa plots, paikot ikot lang naman ang cycles. Gawa nalang ng panibagong istorya. 🤔😘✌️

(don't change your username just because of my - a bit harsh- blabber on your work. 'kay. 😉 Only want to influence or make you realized what would other some silent shy readers want to say. Weren't perfect. But sometimes we could learn from others criticisms or critiques and be better than what we are before. Or just ignored it if you thought, I'm too insensitive and nonsensical.)

God bless. 😇