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Book name: Zindagi Gulzar Hai
Author: NeeSaj79
Chapters read: (10/35)
Genre: Fanfiction
Book status: Ongoing

Title: 0.25/5
I didn't find this title relevant to the book at all. Also this title is too common. Over 50 books are there with the same title. This title doesn't tell me anything about the plot so I would suggest you to change it.

Cover: 0.25/5
I didn't like the cover at all. All the pictures are just overlapping over each other which doesn't give it a nice look. Also, the fonts aren't looking nice. I didn't understand why
have you put two subtitles in the cover. Also the subtitles that are there doesn't go with the plot. I would suggest you to change the cover and get a nice cover from some good
graphic shop.

Book description: 2/5
The first line only has no punctuation in it which creates a bad impression. Also it's written in the blurb that there is a mantra of Naina's life and she keeps on saying this about life but I didn't find any such thing in the book. Next coming up to Sameer, you
have written that he has anger management issues but I didn't find him getting angry much. Also there are so many sentences which aren't framed properly at all because of
which I had to read twice to understand the meaning.

Prologue: 0/5
There was no prologue. A prologue is a must in any book as it gives an idea about how the story is going to be and is the first thing that attracts the readers. I would suggest you to write a prologue for this book. It's very well needed.

Grammar: 3/10
First problem was that the punctuations weren't placed correctly. Seems like a small thing but incorrect punctuation marks hold the power to change the meaning of the whole sentence. While writing the dialogues, at many places you haven't put the double inverted commas correctly which made it confusing as to when the dialogue is starting and when it's ending. The heart and mind conversations also had double inverted commas which made it confusing if he really was speaking that or thinking. In mind and heart conversations you could have used single inverted commas. Then there was a sentence in the first chapter 'She had come like a storm striked his heart like a thunder and went away even before realizing.' Now in this sentence there is no comma because of which I had to read this sentence thrice to decipher the meaning. You should have written like 'She had come like a storm, striked his heart like a thunder and went away
even before he could realize.' Apart from this there were many grammatical errors. So, I would suggest you to edit the whole book once.

Plot: 5/10
The plot was nice but the execution wasn't. There were plot holes in the story like Naina was grown up in an orphanage herself so how could she adopt a child when she herself
didn't have any steady income? I felt that this thing was just added unnecessarily. Sameer's family and background wasn't described well. Even till the 10th chapter I didn't
understand who all were there in Sameer's family. Also, I didn't get what relation did Munna and Pundit had with Sameer so things looked illogical at points. Apart from
Naina and Sameer scenes, I couldn't understand any other thing happening in the story. Otherwise, you had planned the plot well but could have written it in even a better way.

Character(s)/ Development: 1/5
First of all the characters weren't crafted properly. Naina wanted to become a criminal lawyer but I couldn't see even a single quality of that in her personality. She was so
gullible, jovial and fun loving that I wonder how would she solve any case? I didn't understand Sameer's character from the start only as there was no character sketch. In the blurb, it's written he had anger issues but while reading it I don't think he had some serious anger issues. There was not much character development I could find.

Flow of the story: 0.25/5
The flow was too fast. In the first chapter only, there was no description about Naina and Sameer's life, family but they just directly met and in first meet only, he fell in love with her. This could have been slow. First you should have described how Naina and
Sameer are in real and what they do as it would have given a clear view of their characters. Then suddenly they became friends and Sameer even told his Nanu that he loves someone so early. Then Naina also fell in love with him suddenly when it was not
at all expected. There were unwanted conversations more because of which the actual plot of the story was missing at many places.

Creativity: 3/5
I really enjoyed the conversation between Sameer and Naina. It was visible that you had put a lot of effort in that. Also, I liked the concept of heart and mind speaking as you showed that Sameer was a reserved person.

Your interest based on the content: 1/5
Though the story was entertaining and had a lot to offer but still I wasn't hooked to the story because there were so many grammatical mistakes and the pace was so fast.

Overall opinion: 4.25/10
Work on the grammar. Don't forget to place the punctuation marks correctly. Make the pace a bit slow. Don't write very long chapters but just go with the actual flow. Try to show Sameer's personality as well and not just focus on one person. Reduce the
conversations and describe the situation more. A lot of work is needed to be done. The plot is nice so if you will edit the story a bit, it would even become better.

Total: 20/75

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