🍌🎖SHORT STORY RESULTS🎖🍌

Hello guys, I just want to ask you all to be patient with me, especially when it comes to giving the prizes promised. I am hosting this award plus I am judging a handful of categories because judges have backed out or forgot that they were supposed to be a judge in this award, so I had to take matters into my hands and do the judging myself. This is a lot of work for me. I have to make the stickers also on top of everything else I am doing. So please wait for me to vote and comment on your books, although the only category I hadn't done that for is fanfiction. I will get to them soon when I have the time. Thank you.

Now this category was judged by yours truly. I hope you guys don't find the scoring too harsh. I judged your books as honestly as I could.

🍌FINDING MYSELF by Olivia_Benedetti

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 2/5
First Chapter: 2/10
Grammar/Punctuations: 8/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 10/20
Plot: 3/10
Character: 4/10
Description: 2/10
Literary Devices: 2/10
Originality: 5/5
Connection: 1/10
Overall Impression: 2/10
TOTAL: 53/130

FULL REVIEW: The originality of this piece is phenomenal. I see that the writer thought out of the box for this one, good job there. But the blurb didn't do anything for your book. I was not excited about moving on to read your story because of how you worded the blurb. The first chapter has a lot of potential. It gave me a sad girl writing in her diary about a breakup' vibe. Now that right there is gold because these are the type of opening people love here on Wattpad. Why I gave you such a low score for the first chapter it's because the writing style needs work, along with grammar, punctuation, and vocabulary. After chapter one the chapters that followed were barely 200 words, I counted 150 in one of them and that just isn't enough for anything important to be written about the plot.

As for your grammar in this particular book, it isn't your best; mixed tenses, run-on sentences, poor sentence construction, and redundancies. You need to find a way to construct sentences so that your story can read a lot smoother. Also, I think writing in the past tense is your strong suit, use it.

Moving on to the spelling, it was ok. I did see some typos, so it would do you good to edit. Your vocabulary wasn't strong at all. You need to find words that will help to bring your story alive, plus you keep overusing words/pronouns and that took away some of the enjoyment for me. The MC (sad girl) is ok, but I need to see her elevating, in every chapter she seems as if she is in the same place she was in chapter one.

Description and literary devices were almost absent in your work. So the plot fell flat, and I didn't want to continue because of this fact. I wish you luck with your writing.

🍌SHORT STORIES by Lilys_cornerrr

Genre: 5/5
Title: 1/5
Blurb: 0/5
First Chapter/Prologue: 6/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 12/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 14/20
Plot: 6/10
Character: 5/10
Description: 5/10
Literary Devices: 2/10
Connection: 2/10
Originality: 3/5
Overall Impression: 4/10
TOTAL: 65/130

REVIEW: I read Ashley's story and it is a fairly written piece. I got to know a bit of the character and I think you did a fair job with that. The first chapter caught my attention, I immediately wanted to know what will take place next. But the grammatical errors and the poor dialects made it difficult for me to enjoy. When writing dialects, start a new paragraph when a new person speaks. Work on punctuation placements and a way to enhance your vocabulary. Please write a proper blurb and add some literary devices. Good luck with your writing.

🍌BTS ONESHOTS by ViniShah2

Genre: 5/5
Title: 1/5
Blurb: 0/5
First Chapter: 5/10
Grammar/punctuation: 17/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 17/20
Plot: 5/10
Character: 5/10
Description: 2/10
Literary Devices: 2/10
Originality: 5/5
Connection: 5/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
TOTAL: 74/130

REVIEW: I must commend this writer for their smooth writing style, I enjoyed that aspect. The first chapter was nice, it could have been more exciting, but it still made me want to move on to the next chapter. The chapters were funny, especially the dialects. Great grammar and spelling. Just wished there was a step up in the vocabulary and the dialects need to be tagged properly and a new paragraph formed when someone new is speaking.

🍌 ARTHUR BUCHANAN MYSTERIES by phoenixthebaird1887

Genre: 5/5
Title: 3/5
Blurb: 0/5
First Chapter: 7/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 16/20
Spelling/ Vocabulary: 16/20
Literary Devices: 4/10
Description: 5/10
Plot: 7/10
Character: 6/10
Originality: 4/5
Connection: 6/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
TOTAL: 84/130

REVIEW: There was not much to judge, but that one chapter told me a lot about what to expect as the story progresses. I found it very interesting and I liked the mystery of it. Just work on sentence constructions. I needed you to include better descriptions and literary devices in your chapter. And please work on a blurb, there was none to judge. But overall a hooking beginning.

🍌THROUGH HER EYES by _jugnuu_

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 3/5
First Chapter: 5/10
Grammar/punctuation: 16/20
Spelling/vocabulary: 15/20
Plot: 7/10
Character: 6/10
Description: 5/10
Literary Devices: 4/10
Connection: 5/10
Originality: 4/5
Overall Impression: 7/10
TOTAL: 87/130

REVIEW: I was impressed with this story. The writer has a nice writing style that is enjoyable to read. I just wish some of the chapters weren't so short, but still, they were long enough to get the writer's points across. Nice grammar and spelling, just work on the punctuation. Also, I wished you used more description and literary devices so that I could connect more emotionally to your story.

🍌TOXICITY by waterandfire_xox

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 4/5
First Chapter/Prologue: 10/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 15/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 15/20
Plot: 6/10
Character: 7/10
Description: 4/10
Literary Devices: 4/10
Connection: 6/10
Originality: 2/5
Overall Impression: 6/10
TOTAL: 89/130

REVIEW: First I must commend you on your hooking blurb, I liked it a lot. Now your opening chapter is where you shone brightly. Even with the grammatical errors, I enjoyed it to the maximum. The major problem with your story were the grammatical errors/mixed tenses, poor descriptions and literary devices, which affected the other low scores. The mixed tenses made it hard to enjoy the book the way how I wanted. The description needed to be more noticeable so that your story could come alive in your readers' heads.

🍌LEAVING THE SOLAR SYSTEM by ArabelaTaylor

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 2/5
First Chapter: 8/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 14/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 15/20
Plot: 7/10
Literary Devices: 2/10
Description: 6/10
Characters: 6/10
Originality: 5/5
Connection: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
TOTAL: 90/130

REVIEW: A very nice plot. The first chapter blew me away. Immediately the plot came into play. I saw that the writer has a wild and beautiful imagination. I didn't have much to judge but the three chapters stirred up my imagination a bit and I wanted to see what else your story has to offer. The main problems were the grammatical errors; mixed tenses and sentence constructions and there were many places that needed conjunctive words to enhance the reading experience. Also work on incorporating literary devices into your work. But overall a decent read.

🍌OF STARS AND SHADOWS by s0giia

Genre: 3/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 1/5
First Chapter: 6/10
Grammar/punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 18/20
Plot: 5/10
Character: 7/10
Description: 7/10
Literary Devices: 8/10
Connection: 8/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 5/10
TOTAL: 96/130

REVIEW: First and foremost, the writing style was so beautiful, it's almost poetic. Loved the title, but the blurb was not catching at all. The first chapter was very emotional and I could feel the MC's distress of emotions. I just wish there was more in terms of plot wise. The plot wasn't that detailed apart from the emotions. Your use of descriptions were fair and your literary devices were near perfect. Just please work on the plot. Good luck with your story.

🍌SCHOOL SHOOTING TRAGEDY by Tunnyplz0

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 3/5
First Chapter: 6/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 19/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 18/20
Literary Devices: 5/10
Description: 5/10
Plot: 6/10
Character: 8/10
Connection: 6/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 6/10
TOTAL: 97/130

REVIEW:  A very interesting route with the different P.O.Vs, I for one loved it. Your grammar is perfect and your punctuations is near perfection. You also did well with the spelling but maybe step up a bit with vocabulary. Now the major problem is the description and literary devices. Be more creative with them, especially in highlighting the events of this thrilling plot. I wish you luck with your story.

🍌I BLAME GRAVITY by wanderedwriter

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 3/5
First Chapter: 7/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 20/20
Literary Devices: 8/10
Description: 6/10
Plot: 8/10
Character: 8/10
Connection: 7/10
Originality: 3/5
Overall Impression: 7/10
TOTAL: 105/130

REVIEW: A nice read with cute characters. The plot was nice and I liked the writer's style and the mood they set, it was easy for me to find enjoyment. I was impressed with the excellent usage of vocabulary. Grammar was also nice, just a few Punctuation errors. I just wish that there was a little more descriptive details so that your story could shine even brighter.

🍌MY MARRIED SOULMATE by jimhen211

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 5/5
First Chapter: 10/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 16/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 17/20
Literary Devices: 7/10
Description: 6/10
Plot: 8/10
Character: 10/10
Connection: 10/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 8/10
TOTAL: 112/130

REVIEW: Now this writer here, is my real life best-bro and this book is loosely based off a true story. Now it's a very interesting read so far, definitely piques my curiosity to find out what will happen to Jasper next. But the punctuation is horrible and you need to learn some new words man, because the vocab was a bit poor, like mine. But truly dude, you have something here, your work needs editing and also the carnival part where you were describing the different sounds was unnecessary/too long, almost caused the story to lose it's flow. But a good job overall.

🍌ARISING FROM BLOOD by AidenHaust

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 5/5
First Chapter: 5/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 20/20
Literary Devices: 10/10
Description: 8/10
Plot: 7/10
Character: 8/10
Connection: 8/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 8/10
TOTAL: 112/130

REVIEW: One of the most original plots in this category, but the execution was not well delivered as I had hoped. The blurb was excellent, it built up my adrenaline and I was eager to read the book. Now to the opening chapter, again my excitement kept building and before the chapter was finished the ball was dropped. There was so much more you could have done with the prologue to make things more interesting. Didn't find chapter one that much better either but chapter two is where the magic happened, I love your descriptions, but your literary devices/play on words is where you shone best, along with your awesome spelling and vocabulary. I know this is short story but the chapters didn't have to be that short. I think this story could have easily be in the top three with some revamping. Good luck with your book.

🍌SUNS AND SPARKS by booklover311921

Genre: 3/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 2/5
First Chapter: 6/10
Grammar/punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 20/20
Literary Devices: 10/10
Descriptions: 8/10
Plot: 6/10
Character: 10/10
Connection: 10/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
TOTAL: 113/130

REVIEW: Beautiful writing, each piece was like a poem that connects to each other. It was soothing to read. Love the romance and sadness of it all. But I really wanted to see the plot coming alive But a nice feel good read.

🍌BERNADETTE'S DIARY by AdrielleReina

Genre: 5/5
Title: 4/5
Blurb: 5/5
First Chapter: 10/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 18/20
Literary Devices: 7/10
Description: 7/10
Plot: 8/10
Character: 10/10
Connection: 10/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
TOTAL: 117/130

REVIEW: This is a writer who takes pride in their work. The opening chapter blew my mind and that news paper clipping was icing on the cake. Loved the plotline of this story and the uniqueness of trying to find the killer through a school girl's diary. I seriously enjoyed this story, I just needed you to step up with the description and literary devices, plus clean up the punctuation errors a bit. Good job overall.

🍌CHEERS TO OUR HONORARY MENTION;
🏅WAIT! I WROTE THAT? by CroodsGirl

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 5/5
First Chapter: 7/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 20/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 18/20
Plot: 8/10
Character: 8/10
Description: 10/10
Literary Devices: 10/10
Connection: 8/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
TOTAL: 119/130

REVIEW: This writer may be one of the most imaginative I've come across on Wattpad. She has the ability to create worlds and make them believable to her readers. This book shows how talented she is from her younger years, so writing is in her blood. I loved the stories in this book, the writing style isn't as polished as her later books are, but I still enjoyed them. This is definitely a book I'd let my young daughter read, so she can enjoy the wonderful stories inside. Good job.

🍌OUR THIRD PLACE WINNER;
🥉WHISPERING SPRINGS: NEW MEXICO by LeaSheryn

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 5/5
First Chapter: 10/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 20/20
Plot: 8/10
Character: 9/10
Description: 9/10
Literary Devices: 9/10
Connection: 10/10
Originality: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
TOTAL: 123/130

REVIEW: A wonderfully well written story. I love your usage of descriptions and literary devices. But the plot, I found it very well thought of, but try and focus more on the events taking place in the surroundings and not only the people, meaning tell us more about the place. But I enjoyed the story. The characters were likeable and I am truly impressed with this book. Well done!

🍌OUR SECOND PLACE WINNER IS;
🥈LOST BOYS OF LONDON by BellOfSilence

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 5/5
First Chapter: 10/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 20/20
Plot:10/10
Character: 8/10
Description: 10/10
Literary Devices: 10/10
Connection: 10/10
Originality: 3/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
TOTAL: 124/130

REVIEW: Even though this is some kind of spinoff from Peter Pan, I still felt the writer put their own little twist on it and made it their own. Everything was near perfect, but the vocabulary usage was superb and it really helped in painting the mysterious aspect of your story. You did a good job.

🍌OUR FIRST PLACE WINNER IS;
🥇VEI FI A MEA? (Will You Be Mine?) By FionaCakes91

Genre: 5/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb: 5/5
First Chapter/Prologue: 10/10
Grammar/Punctuation: 18/20
Spelling/Vocabulary: 20/20
Literary Devices: 10/10
Plot: 10/10
Character: 10/10
Description: 10/10
Connection: 10/10
Originality: 3/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
TOTAL: 126/130

FULL REVIEW: WOW! From the moment I started reading the first line in the prologue, the tone was set. I knew that something dark and eerie is going to take place. I don't want to give away spoilers, but the way you incorporated the vampire's love for the darkness of the night sent chills down my spine. With your wonderful descriptions I was there with the vampire, seeing what he was seeing and sometimes tasting what he was tasting. The hairs on my body stood up when you wrote, “The warm blood flowed so sweetly down my throat, wetting the darkness of my soul."

Your grammar was perfect, just minor Punctuation slip ups. But your verbiage was just splendid and I loved how you gave each character their own voice. Like I could easily tell the difference when a chapter is in the vampire's P.O.V than in Nicolette's. So well done there.

I love the medieval vibe to the plot. The way Ambrose (vampire guy) spoke I could tell he's not from our time. The main plot of the story is not that new, but the subplots made up for that factor. Plus I love the cliffhanger at the end, especially in chapter five. It will have the readers asking a few questions, like who is the sexy female vampire that shows up to Nicky's house with the pizza? Is she Ambrose's lover? 

The writing style is so unique and I enjoyed reading this book. I wish the writer luck on finishing the story.

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