BONUSES THIS TIME!

Interesting Interactions:

For playing with my heart and giving some amazing interactions, which is what I was personally looking for, Neri and Dustin will be given a bonus point.

Cliffhanger Award:

Wynder and Akari took the idea of a cliffhanger literally,so they will pay the price of a fall. Both of you must begin your next entry falling off that cliff. This will severely hinder your ability to kill.

In Hysterics:

For Sir Cumference, Steve Young and Reed Quillearoy have already received a hint to the next task. Apparently having two tributes will give this bonus some extra purpose.

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Tender, Cadelon, and Odyssesus were intrigued by the sudden rush of teamwork. All three of them sat in silence as the news was delivered. The news of the arena, and how the tributes were faring.

Note: Tender gave notes :) Keep checking back in; Cadelon should be posting notes eventually.

SCORES (in order of turning in):

Dustin Octavious and Neri Ravenna:

Tender: 10; From the opening line, I was intrigued. This was an extremely rushed entry, yet the tone and mood couldn't have felt more relaxed. "You're the best grey I've ever met," was a beautiful line, and I could really see the bond between the characters. You left me wanting more, which irritated me, but it was an excited irritation. One thing: I was very confused that the cave scene was a flashback (still am, really). You two are great co-workers, and I'm glad this task let that shine. Neri's emotions were so clear, but Dustin's were more impulsive and quick, which really made me think. Their relationship is something I now look forward to in this contest.

Odysseus: 9.5

Cadelon: 9.5

SCORE: 10.2 + [2] = 11.6

Wynder Douglas and Akari Hijikata:

Tender: 9; Your dialogue and interactions were the best part of the entry, and the two of your characters felt really awkward (in a good way). Fantastic descriptions regarding the earthquake, but I really wanted more than one line of your character's fear. Also, I think the beginning could've been tweaked a bit, in order to really pull me into the story immediately. Overall, you two have a strong grasp on characterization, and I enjoyed reading. Wynder, I like how your character thinks before they act; that's often lost in writing. Akari, every entry I see growth, which is crazy considering how much of a great writer you were already. A great pairing and a great entry!

Odysseus: 9

Cadelon: 9.5

SCORE: 9.2

Electra and Amelia Montaigne:

Tender: 10.5; I loved, loved, loved how realistic this entry was. Your characters didn't get along at all. Well, kind of.. I don't know what to think! Electra, your character seems to lose stealth every task, and I want to know more about her. Please, give us more of why she is the way she is. Amelia, I have absolutely no complaints. The way you made the earthquake start as no big deal and escalate into danger really engaged me. This was really fantastic, guys. The beginning was a lot rockier than the middle/end, especially with sentence structure, and I encourage you guys to dive even further with dialogue. It can sound more natural. Great job.

Odysseus: 10.5

Cadelon: 10.5

SCORE: 10.5

Aperio Cornwell and Kale Emrys:

Tender: 7.5; I was left wanting more, in a negative way. This partner task was meant to join tributes together, but most of this entry was still Arthur/Kale. It lacked a lot of Aperio, as well as fluidity. There was something really off the whole time because of Arthur. Kale: let go of him. I know that he is a huge part of Kale at this point, but he took over a bit too much. It was off-task and your score reflects that, which is disappointing because both of you have had better writing in the past. I'm really looking forward to how you guys do next time.

Odysseus: 8

Cadelon: 8.4

SCORE: 7.9 + [1] = 8.9

Steve Young and Reed Quillearoy:

Tender: 11; Fantastic beginning that set a perfect mood for the entry. I was laughing hysterically at Steve's puns and because of this, my heart warmed when he saved Reed. You immediately established a care for the characters, simultaneously giving the two a relationship. The writing of Steve paid off this task, and these two tributes are a perfect pairing, in my eyes. Please make them stay together. I was close to giving this a perfect score, but something towards the end confused me. The beginning of the tsunami was a bit odd, and I hadn't even realized it happened.

Odysseus: 11

Cadelon: 11

SCORE: 11

Amani Alurai and Corradhin Cole:

Tender: 8.5; You guys are brilliant writers, but it felt really fake here. The feelings behind your characters didn't feel as genuine as usual, and don't know why. I think sometimes, it becomes really verbose, causing me to pull away from Amani and Corradhin alike. For the first time, I had a feeling of "reading to score" and I felt bad. I really loved the metaphor of the giant being underground; it was definitely the best description of the earthquake. Try not to over-write, which is what I believe happened here.

Odysseus: 9.5

Cadelon: 9

SCORE: 9

Yukana Chamberly and Adonis Rune:

Tender: 9.5; Considering you two had significantly less time because of the whole partnering debacle, this was really great! I wanted Adonis to feel more afraid of Yukana at first, and even Yukana would be scared. One of you could have easily killed the other, and I felt that part was slightly sipped over. The writing itself was solid with he action, but bring more emotions next task.

Odysseus: 9

Cadelon: 9.5

SCORE: 9.3

Allium Anthromis and Venenius Linguore:

Tender: 10.5; First paragraph was all I needed to be swept into this entry. It was extremely organized and the earthquake was established as well. I like how it all came together in the end as well, and I believe only a couple things could've been improved on. Probably in places that lacked fluidity because of the whole co-writing thing, so that doesn't matter for next task!

Odysseus: 10.5

Cadelon: Did not grade.

Score: 10.3

Danelieux: Your 750 word review and one unlimited word count has been revoked for an automatic advance to the next task. This was discussed thoroughly, and we decided this was fair because...

From Task Five and on, writing rankings will not decide who goes up for votes. Individual task scores will.