BONUS TIME:

Repetition is Key:

Because I a sucker for some good one-liners, Neri Ravenna will be receiving a bonus point for repeating her line, "I think it's time I stopped hiding." It was very good. 

Rhyme Time:

I am also a sucker for some well-placed poetry in some narrative. Don't you love getting to know Tender? Anyway, Steve Young will receive an extra ballot next round. This ballot is exclusive from the others, so you may use it to ballot someone you've already killed. Did I mention it counts as two?

Tsk, Tsk:

Not all rewards are good, I must inform you. While this won't exactly hinder you too much, Amani Alurai will be unable to communicate with her allies the next task because she just had to open your mouth to shriek. Mistakes aren't good. Electra would know, because she let her attacker get the upper hand. Both of you, your tributes must be alone for the entirety of the next task. Let's just say-

Well, I'll leave that for later...

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We had a new form of optioning your scores so they'll be more precise. We each gave a score, than found the median of each. Due to this new way, you might find some of your scores lower or higher depending on what each of the game makers thought. It allowed for a voice to each be held accountable instead of debating over who was better or worse. 

Thank you. 

As always, ladies first...

THE FEMALE BLOODBATH SCORES

CAPITOL FEMALE - LAVENDER STONE -

Scored: 3.2

Why: Your worked seemed better than the last time, despite your score. Work on explaining each of their deaths. 

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DISTRICT 1 FEMALE - ALLIUM ANTHROMIS -

Scored: 11

Why: You've kept with your word, and are still holding strong. Good job. 

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DISTRICT 2 FEMALE - AMELIA MONTAIGNE -

Scored: 10

Why: A slight improvement from last round, great job, just try and focus on the keen details that are important. 

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DISTRICT 3 FEMALE - ELECTRA -

Scored: 11

Why: Your writing has a nice flow, and Tender has found a great liking to Electra, keep it on. 

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DISTRICT 4 FEMALE - AMANI ALURAI -

Scored: 9

Why: Amani has begun to grow into a developed character, and with a few more improvements and humanly flaws, she'll be well rounded. 

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DISTRICT 5 FEMALE - TILLA LECTRA -

Scored: 7.5

Why: The part I was most confused with was you listed all your deaths but I didn't see any of them in your entry. 

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DISTRICT 6 FEMALE - NERI RAVENNA -

Scored: 9.8 + [1] = 10.8

Why: Neri reminds me of a past tribute Narian Alicia Carmile, that's a good thing. Neri is one of those competitors that I don't dwell on but I feel sneaking up in the corner. 

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DISTRICT 7 FEMALE - AEREN MARGAUX -

Scored: 8

Why: I noticed a few grammatical errors that had be getting stuck and losing the story in some perspectives.

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DISTRICT 8 FEMALE - MIZZY HAZE -

Scored: 6.5

Why: I keep coming back to the fact she bit his ankle, it's kinda funny. 

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DISTRICT 9 FEMALE - YUKANA CHAMBERLY -

Scored: 7.3

Why: I'm starting to understand more of who she is as a tribute, I like her personality and her ever daring charm. 

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DISTRICT 10 FEMALE - AKARI HIJIKATA -

Scored: 9

Why: Besides the plot of your entry, I like the direction you took it in. 

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DISTRICT 11 FEMALE - ADONIS RUNE -

Scored: 8

Why: Major step up from when you were late when handing in your entry. I'm excited to see what comes of you in the future. 

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DISTRICT 12 FEMALE - WYNDER DOUGLAS -

Scored: 9.5

Why: I love your adjectives and verbs you use. Always a fresh start to see them being used in such a way. 

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DISTRICT 13 FEMALE - LILITH AMBERSEE

Scored: 8.2

Why: My only advice would be trying to make it seem like a struggle. You don't just escape easily, I wished to have seen that drawn out a bit more. 

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Exciting, exciting... Since you received your initial 'paragraphs' the first time to offer a sum of where you stood, the comments are now tending to be shorter and more cut.

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And finally to the Gents...

MALE BLOODBATH SCORES

CAPITOL MALE - WOLFGANG WESTERFELD -

Scored: 8.7

Why: You gave us a strong beginning but slowly fiddled out towards the ending, try to extend the impact throughout the entire entry.

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DISTRICT 1 MALE - DANELIEUX LEON -

Scored: 10

Why: You had both a good story and held my attention. I could visualize the scene well. 

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DISTRICT 2 MALE - VENENIUS LINGUORE -

Scored: 10.5

Why: I saw real promise in Venenius and I attend to find out more about him, even if it means well in the ranks.

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DISTRICT 3 MALE - JACK DARKWOOD -

Scored: 0 

Why: Automatically eliminated. 

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DISTRICT 4 MALE - CORRADHIN COLE -

Scored: 9.4

Why: I love his tribute but I think you need to spend more time giving him an originality. He feels almost automatic when what he only cares about is Beckett and redeeming his death. Try to add something that make Corradhin unique and owned. 

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DISTRICT 5 MALE - DUSTIN OCTAVIUS -

Scored: 8.8

Why: Excited to see you've made improvements, keep it up. Your description is becoming better. 

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DISTRICT 6 MALE - ARTHUR PENN -

Scored: 8.5

Why: Your entry was strong and even more so very like his character. His movements and actions seemed like his from the little we've learned. 

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DISTRICT 7 MALE - REED QUILLEAROY -

Scored: 9.5

Why: You're entries always include something that I've never seen before and is purely to your writing style. The joke at the end was different and seemed like a Reed thing to do.

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DISTRICT 8 MALE - NED LEANDTHRED -

Scored: 2.5

Why: I love that you are working at it, as I see improvements, but when it came to all our scores, this was the score that came up. If you'd like, ask us for some advice on what you can improve. 

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DISTRICT 9 MALE - STEVE YOUNG -

Scored: 9.5

Why: I love his hair, that needed to be said. Along with that, I really found myself enjoying his entry and wanting to read on and see what else was going to happen before realizing I needed to post the next task for any of that to happen.

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DISTRICT 10 MALE - ALLIUM MEEDS -

Scored: x

Why: Dropped from the competition.

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DISTRICT 11 MALE - APERIO CORNWELL -

Scored: 7.2

Why: Some people have a harder time writing action while others tend to be better at emotion, I feel you're one of the latter. (I'm the first choice so I can sympathize with you there)

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DISTRICT 12 MALE - KALE EMRYS -

Scored: 10

Why: I really like him, this entry especially gave him a voice and a motivation. Loving it. 

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DISTRICT 13 MALE - EROS DEMAKIS -

Scored: 8.8

Why: I like your character, I think Allium Anthromis portrayed his cocky side nicely in her entry. 

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Ahh, who really wants to know their ranks? Eh? 
Yes I know.. Expect them soon. 

The courier,

Wisteria Wiles