As yes my little tributes, sadly there in going to be no mini story for this section due to the fact we're already writing down so much for the in depth reviews. Your team score it what matters this round more than your personal scores. This rounds writing rankings will be a little more lenient, since you'll be voted off by teams.

GASP

No, calm your suspenders and let us finish. The 1st team receives automatic immunity, the second and third are those up for the platter. I beg you to VOTE for those who write good and are amazing writers, NOT who are a challenge. We take your votes under consideration but in the end, for this round we'll choose who leaves. More will be clarified on that chapter, you'll have more votes and able to vote for yourself.

On to it!

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Smoke and Ashes:

Okay, as I read through the story you guys managed to create, I noticed a few things. It really stuck out who wrote which parts, something that I really didn't want to see. That's sounds really confusing so let be clarify. This idea was taken after two of my favorite authors in the entire world; Cassandra Clare and Holly Black. Together they Co-Wrote a book and you couldn't even begin to tell where one line started and the other ended. No, you'll not get point deducted for that, but keep it in mind.

Some parts were confusing, such as the beginning and the part with Achmetha dying(?) then being alive. I'm guessing someone killed him off than had to bring him to life somehow, right? Then at other times, it was questioning your choice of paragraphing. It seemed that a lot of the paragraphs started with the tributes, and then lead into their thoughts own perspective.

This is more of what I would have liked to see:

"Together both Azrael and Melody thought through the devious mounds of snow. The trek was both lonesome and devoting, yet there was nothing more neither of them could do but watch as Toby toppled and plowed along with Achmetha miserably guiding him like a lost pup."

No way am I upset by this. I'm actually pretty happy you guys managed to work together and write this. It took the plate, all the entries did really. This was a hard task and we as the Game Makers knew that already. Though I just have to quote Roxanne because she really made me laugh:

"This was really hard, really stressful, and really painful. I just wanted to say that. Oh, and really complicated too. I could keep going on and on, but you know, time's a wasting. I think everyone did their fair share (though it was all so complicated I mostly just sat there like 'duhhhh... okay, cool...'). We all worked together with the editing and stuff, and we pretty much destroyed our brains on it too. Enjoy."

S&A TRIBUTE SCORES

These are based off of what you did and helped with for your task entry. Also when saying the idea, this excludes the main plot.

District 1 Male - Azrael Thanatos,

Scored:  10 [You had a nice mix of everything, both your own work, ideas, and others influences]

District 3 Male - Achmetha,

Scored: 9.5 [Did a lot of your own work, vague with the idea]

District 9 Female - Roxanne Estradas,

Scored: 9 [You seemed to do a lot with your own work and close to none with the idea]

District 6 Male - Toby Winters,

Scored: 10 [Did little of your own work, very bodacious with the idea and being apart]

District 12 Female - Melody Shades,

Scored: 10 [I highly enjoyed the paragraphs that you wrote especially the last few]

OVERALL TEAM SCORE: 3RD

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Ember and Coal:

Ah, you have me worried there at the beginning when I found out 3 days in that some of your teammates were still confused over the fact this was a team entry. To be honest, I was biting my nails to stubs just by how many times I thought about it. Not to worry though, I highly enjoyed your entry. The beginning was smooth and really felt the relish as you all wrote fluently.

Besides the italics, it was hard to tell who wrote which sections and I absolutely loved it. This was a team I was expecting a lot from since a lot of their members held great potential. It was filled with a very nice mix of variety of different ages, writing styles and tributes. In your entry, you allowed your tributes to express their personalities while still making sure everyone had been included.

Your difficulties with time zones must have been extremely frustrating and I completely get that. I don't know if this whole 'team' idea was original but from the way you all spoke about it makes me feel as if you weren't expecting it at all.

Though there were those few people who poked a stick through the sun, one of those people being Wiley Terus:

"This one was a bit more fun I think. Okay, a lot more. I enjoyed working with Shay and Tess and Karla. It was good. I got more involved. They're really good teammates. It was a bit harder to work with those who couldn't open the Doc, but we worked it all out. We got it to work just fine (eventually). So I loved this team. It was awesome :D"

Glad to hear it, now this can't only be praise.

The scene were Wiley was trying to keep both Bellona and Anastasia away from the berries seemed a little fuzzy. You skipped pretty quickly from the previous scene to this one. If you put in a small transaction sentence or two between, it would have been a lot cleaner. Although your middle section could use a little 'pick me up' the beginning and end were my favorite pieces.

In the middle it seemed as if you were trying to sell it a little too hard. It makes sense that you included 'temptation' and your obstacles, AND the given task but if you would have spaced it up a bit more, it would have made more sense.

Also, like I told Smoke and Ashes, try not to start each paragraph with the character's name.

E&C TRIBUTE SCORES

These are based off of what you did and helped with for your task entry. Also when saying the idea, this excludes the main plot. 

District 4 Male - Beckett Malen,

Scored: Automatic 11 [You really worked hard on your entry and it showed through]

District 4 Female - Anastasia Juerlia,

Scored: 8 [You made it seem as if you wrote almost the entire thing, I don't think that's quite right]

District 10 Female - Bellona Viellana,

Scored: 8.5 [You seemed to have a nice flow of both towards the beginning but almost none at all at the end]

District 12 Male - Wiley Terus,

Scored: 9 + 1 = [10] [You followed through nicely on your own pieces but could use a little more on idea]

District 13 Male - James Peachton,

Scored: 12 [Whoa, didn't seem like there was a spot you didn't help with, or write yourself. You were the prevalent team player of this task]

OVERALL TEAM SCORE: 1ST

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FROST AND ICE:

You already know what you needed to improve on, due to the fact you chose this round for the in- depth review. Overall though, great job and enjoyable entry although it was very long. :)

F&I TRIBUTE SCORES

These are based off of what you did and helped with for your task entry. Also when saying the idea, this excludes the main plot.

District 2 Male - Alexander Le Monte,

Scored: 10 [You had a great balance of everything]

District 6 Female - Narian Alicia Carmile,

Scored: 8.5 [Few things needed work and for that, we were most definitely grateful to read]

District 7 Male - Colorado Graves,

Scored: 9.5 [The parts you helped with were very provoking]

District 7 Female - Gloxinia Carver,

Scored: 9 [Everyone seemed to hold their end of the bargain in this entry]

District 13 Female - Meri Yanamari,

Scored: 10 [From the moment on, it seemed you did a lot in this project]

OVERALL TEAM SCORE: 2ND