Alright, this first review is of Betrayed but Not Alone, written by DrakeWings. If you want to check out the story once you're done reading this review, just click on his username and you can find it on his profile. Anyway, without further ado, let's get into the review. 

Let's talk about some of the strong points of this fanfiction first. It's an Ash betrayal story, true, but it doesn't follow the usual cliche plotline of Ash's friends betraying him for being weak. That's already a good start because we all know there are way too many stories that follow the usual trope. The spelling and grammar are decent as well, although there are a few errors here and there (nothing that makes the story unreadable, though). I also like the fact that Ash has retained his normal personality, at least for the most part. 

However, there are some things I do have a slight issue with. First of all, it's been nine chapters and we still don't really have a good idea as to why or how the rumor of Ash drugging his Pokemon got started. I also find it strange that, with a rumor like that circulating, Ash is somehow still able to travel around without too much issue. I would have thought that a trainer rumored to be a cheater would be under pretty heavy scrutiny. Even if the majority of people do believe Ash, it would make more sense if there were at least some who believed the rumors. 

Second of all, it would probably be a good idea to tone down on the romance just a little. We already know that Pikachu and Lopunny are together, so we don't need a reminder of their relationship in every single chapter. This story is meant to be about Ash's betrayal, but at the moment it feels more like a bunch of random shipping one-shots. I'm going to quote a bit of text from the story right here. 

"Me and Paul nod and walk to Ash. He wasn't crying, he was just completely silent. We sat with him and I hugged him on impulse. He hugged me back tightly. I never really had a romantic attraction to him and honestly I think we work better as friends rather than a couple." 

First of all, not to be a stickler or anything, but the sentence should be "Paul and I nod and walk to Ash,". There's also a comma missing after "honestly". 

However, the reason I brought up this particular bit of text is that the mention of Dawn only seeing Ash as a friend seems a little bit out of place. It just doesn't really fit in with the current setting. 

Finally, there's just one more point I want to address. It was mentioned in the first chapter that the traitors stole a lot of Ash's Pokemon. Why, then, is there no mention of him making any attempt to get them back? Pokemon thievery is illegal, so he should be able to report them to the authorities. Besides that, I doubt that Ash's Pokemon would allow themselves to be stolen without making any attempt to find him again. 

Anyway, that's all I have to say for this review, so I'll let Rose say her part now. 

A very excellent judge by you Ashley (I sO aGrEe) and now my time to shine! Ok so first off I really like how it is a bit romantic but as Ashley said, tone it down a bit and also how you write out the battle scenes. BUT your direct speech is a wee bit off. For example this is what you wrote from your book :

"Almost there. I wonder what Iris and Cilan are up to." Ash thought as he got out of bed, being careful as to not wake up Pikachu, and got dressed in his Unova attire.

Instead it could be:

"Almost there! I wonder what Iris and Cilan are up to?" Ash thought as he got out of bed, being careful not to wake up Pikachu and got dressed in his Unova attire.

And remember direct speech? I used to make the same mistakes as well, here's the flaw with an example :

"We like pizza." Mary said. - This is incorrect.

"We like pizza," Mary said. - This is correct.

And remember that paragraph I asked you about? It doesn't really make sense to me as a reader. If they are going to get Ash's powerhouse Pokémon and he is unaware, how did he get to know? I think that you might have to edit that a bit. And refrain from using present tense so much. Whenever Ash is talking in his point of view, make it past tense including every action the characters do.

Try to read other books to get an idea what yours should look like (I highly recommend Ashley's books). And I suggest get a beta reader to help you or anyone of your friends to help as well. That's all from me.