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You Are Always Mine
By: TheSmileMaker

Reviewer: The_Scarlet_Writer

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Cover/Title: 9/10

- I think both of them are very cute and quite catchy. Although the title is a tad cliché, but who said it's a bad thing?

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Blurb: 8/10

- In my opinion, the blurb is good enough. Granted, it can be a little better if possible. The story sounds nice so far, perhaps heartbreaking?

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First chapter: 10/10

- Such an amazing chapter, oh my god! First of all, it was so satisfying to read a guy's point of view, it rarely happens. Second of all, you have a unique style of writing, and I found the parts in italic really nice and a beautiful addition to the story. (This applies to the rest of the chapters as well).

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Grammar/Punctuation: 8/10

- Mostly, you have a great grammar. However, make sure you stick to one tense in narration (I noticed you using the present tense a couple of times).

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Vocabulary: 9/10

- You have a varied vocabulary and you use it to your advantage in your story. The descriptions are very nice and fun to read.

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Plot/Pacing: 9/10

- I think the way you started by him having already met her, and him retelling the scene of their meeting with his present inputs of that night was a very smart idea.

- I admire the fact that you're taking your time in developing their relationship, and not just rushing it.

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Character/Character development: 9/10

- I found it easy to relate and to understand each character, especially Jaikar. The way you include some indirect details about their personality is really cool; for example, the parts where Jaikar helps a kid riding his bicycle, it shows how kind he is.

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Originality: 8/10

- It's a nice and cute story, very fun to read too. It's not the most original story I've read, but there are still many creative parts in it!

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World building: 9/10

- I think you did nicely here; I felt myself getting sucked in and I kept wondering what was going to happen next.

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Imagery: 9/10

- Good job here. Everything was smooth and easy to read, which helped me imagine the scenes in my head.

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Overall: I hope you keep going and never give up. A little editing on the tenses and you're good to go.

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