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Trapped In A Tale
By: RoyalPurple123

Reviewer: ILoveFiction1001

Cover/Title: 9/10

- I really liked the cover of the book and its title. It's intriguing and interesting and will certainly catch the reader's attention.

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Blurb: 9/10

- The blurb is amazing. I was immediately interested in being in Tressa's shoes. To go on an adventure with your best friend with the bad guys behind your back with nothing but a book and a heirloom.

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First chapter: 8/10

- Good first chapter. It was engaging and engrossing. I liked the conversation between Dave and the Boss. I think telling that they work for organized crime right off the bat is abrupt, so if it could be edited to sound more mysterious that would be awesome.

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Grammar/Punctuation: 8/10

- Very well written! The grammar and punctuation was on point! A little revision before updating and it would be perfect. The syntax however sounded abrupt so maybe a little easy flow would be nicer.

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Vocabulary: 6/10

- I could not find a lot of uncommon words. I think they make up a good reading experience. The book is a little abrupt with its description.

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Plot and Pacing: 7/10

- When I read the first chapter I thought it would start right off the bat but then it got slower with the introduction to all the characters. It was a little slow for my liking. Increasing chapter length and adding more descriptions should do the trick.

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Originality: 6/10

- The world building by the author is nice. I felt the frustration the protagonist felt in the earlier chapter of staying in the house. Taking the mother's heirloom and going on an adventure is something not found often.

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Characters: 8/10

- I liked the character of Jaemy and Sarah. For Jamey, it is because he was willing to stick up for his father and support him when things were rough. Sarah for doing anything for her children and family. Even Dave for his quirky personality.

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World Building: 7/10

- Up to the chapters I read, I really enjoyed being in the protagonist's world. Of lavish lives, small simple spaces and organised crime.

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Imagery: 7/10

- The author can work on their description skills a little. Putting as much description of something can help the reader imagine the scene in their heads easier.

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Overall:

A little work on the execution of it all. You have a great idea brewing, keep finessing it and the book will reach wonders.

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