Remember that the point of this review is to guide you to improvement. If you have any questions, do not before afraid to talk to your reviewer or to @ericson119. We are here to help you, not review your book and simply move on to the next one.

The Weld Mountains: A Lands of Ralosia story
By: Sanch250

Cover/Title: 8/10

. Title is brilliant, it makes me feel drawn in.

. The cover is good, but the font is a little bland I think - though I remember you saying last time it is a temporary cover? But I'd really like the picture for this one.

-

Blurb: 8/10

. The blurb content is great. My only "critique" really is that there's a lot of focus on the fact it's a standalone, I'd keep it to one mention of it, so maybe just: "this is the 8th story but can be read alone" kind of thing and leave it there. <3

-

First Chapter: 10/10

. That opening is so strong, I'm really hooked by it. Your descriptive language in this is excellent.

. Honestly, I really think this CAN be read as a standalone. The way you weave the characters introductions - it's obvious it's part of a series (and thats good) but it doesn't make me question things, and it flows nicely. I didn't feel like I was treading unknown waters at all.

. Your descriptions are lovely and rich and it pulled me in right away.

-

Grammar/Punctuation: 9/10

. The dialogue "Except you Ruben" < I would put a comma after 'you' and in the next dialogue "you and I will be fine" < I think it should be 'me' there instead of 'i' but I'd check with grammarly or something because that always differentiates between country and context i think so I could be wrong XD

. "Within it's eyestones" < its doesnt need the apostrophe here :D

. I didn't see anything else, so well done!

-

Vocab: 8/10

. Your vocab is great. The descriptions are totally different to the speech and it works so well: the dialogue feels simple and easy to read while the descriptions are rich and detailed. It's really well done.

. I think my only "critique" is that I'm missing some emotions from the characters. HOWEVER, this is my personal preference as I tend to go for character driven plots in romance or chick lit genres, and that's what tends to be in there LOL. However. I think it might just elevate the characters that little more? But I don't think it's NEEDED if you know what i mean? That's up to you and wouldn't make or break the plot.

-

Plot/Pacing: 10/10

. The plot and pacing were really well done. I didn't feel it was too fast or too slow.

. I think as above, if you added emotions it would both slow down the plot, but I dont think it would harm it. But I wouldn't want it too fast either. The pacing was just right.

. The plot was easy to understand and rich with detail, and I loved it. I didnt feel alienated by the series, and having read about Oopa before, it was a nice touch :D

-

Characters/Character Development: 9.5/10

. All the characters are well characterised and the dialogue tags you use really help with that. I also think that again, though I can see it is part of a series, they don't feel TOO characterised that I'm left out. So well done.

. Their interactions with each other are really well crafted as well.

. The .5 is to do with the emotion thing I've pointed out elsewhere ;)

-

Originality: 10/10

. I have really nothing to say because like before, your series is just original and lovely. Rich of detail and you clearly know your world and that comes across well.

-

World Building: 9/10

. The ONLY reason I mark this down is because of those emotions I talk about - and honestly, this is just personal preference like I say. It really wouldn't make it or break it for me, and I think it's fine as it is.

. I just think adding a little more of that emotional description would elevate it a little more. But it's up to you and not NEEDED because of the genre and nature of this.
Other than that, I think you're pretty perfect with world building.

-

Imagery: 8/10

. Again, amazing. I think you're a master at your craft if i'm honest. Like, I can clearly see everything and that's thanks to your rich world building and imagery. I think I'd love some more for example similies and metaphors, however. But I think for your audience you might not want TOO many either - again I read a lot of emotional character driven things so there's tons of that in my writing and most of what I read. I think again like emotions, it could elevate this, but I also wouldn't want to read too many in this type of story.
Just a suggestion to think about!

-

Overall - A really well built story, and I definitely think it stands alone! I honestly don't have much to suggest, because I genuinely think your writing is lovely.

-

Questions for the author:

- What do you think of the review? Did it help you improve?

- What kind of story are you going for? Tell us so we can understand you.

- What do you enjoy about writing? Tell us how it makes you feel.

- What is your writing process like?