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The Healers
By: D01000

Reviewer: The_Scarlet_Writer

Cover/Title: 8/10

- The title is nice, I really like it.

- The cover is great! My only suggestion would be writing the title a bit lower so that it wouldn't be positioned on the doctor's mask (for contrast).

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Blurb: 9/10

- I actually love the blurb, it's really nice. There's only one slight mistake, it should be "hear something" in this case and not "listen". Anyway, I'm really excited to start reading.

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First Chapter: 8/10

- I think this chapter was a nice start, not bad at all. Ian seems like a complicated misunderstood character, and I'm very excited to unravel him.

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Grammar/Punctuation: 4/10

- I don't think the punctuation is that good if I'm being honest. You have too many run-on sentences. Basically, you need to add more commas. For example, in the prologue, the second paragraph should be " I was happy to say the least, I can't explain how I felt when I told the patient's parents that I have diagnosed their kid successfully, and that their child will be normal again."

- You also have some grammar mistakes such as: (in chapter 1) "Did I paid the debt" should be "did I pay".

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Vocabulary: 8/10

- For the vocabulary part itself, I admire the fact that you used technical medical words where needed.

- I would advise you to add some more descriptions because they make the story come to life.

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Plot/Pacing: 7/10

- The pacing and the plot are both actually nice, but the story wasn't sailing too smoothly. This could be perhaps because of the english mistakes, so working on those would take your book to a whole other level.

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Character/Character development: 7/10

- I like the fact that we can clearly see how much Ian is a misunderstood character, and the way he actually thinks as opposed to what other people think of him (for example, when he overheard someone talking about him in a bad way).

- I would recommend adding some more descriptions of the characters' reactions and feelings; this would help us to get to know them more.

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Originality: 9/10

- I like some of the plot twists you have in there, and I thought your story idea was quite original and interesting.

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World Building / Imagery: 7/10

- You are a talented writer, but in my opinion, the execution needs some work (which I've already mentioned before), and this kind of got in the way of you building a new world, and of us imagining the scenes.

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Overall: Never give up, keep on getting better day by day, and you'll have yourself an amazing book at the end.

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