Life (Review Thirty-Six)
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Life
By: Prarthana_dinesh
Reviewer: The_Scarlet_Writer
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Cover/Title: 9/10
- The title is very simple but also pretty interesting.
- I really like the cover, it's so nice!
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Blurb: 9/10
- I think the blurb is really cute, especially the first two lines.
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First Chapter: 8/10
- In my opinion, the first chapter is a nice start for a book of this kind, starting with the types of humans.
- There are though some technical remarks that I'll be focusing on in the rest of the review.
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Grammar/Punctuation: 7/10
- I think the punctuation needs a little bit of work, such as linking a couple of very short sentences together if they complete the same idea.
- You don't have too many grammatical mistakes, and the ones that you do have can easily be fixed with thorough editing. For example, in the chapter about "fears" : "being drown" should be "being drowned" or "drowning".
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Vocabulary: 7/10
- Overall, you have a wide range of vocabulary, but I do advise you to make sure you don't have too many repetitions, such as in chapter "words", paragraph 5, you used the word "same" many times in a row.
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Plot/Pacing: 9/10
- I like the pacing of the book in general; we started with an introduction and then kept going into deeper subjects the further we got through the chapters.
- As for the chapters themselves, I like how you start each one by posing the problem, then listing some arguments and examples, until we reach a conclusion.
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Character/ Character development: 9/10
- I feel a development in your words, a progression of thoughts and beliefs. The more I read, the more I realise stuff I never thought about before.
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Originality: 9/10
- It is rare to see such a book on wattpad, and I'm glad you had the courage to write one like that; God knows many of us need it.
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World building: 9/10
- If you keep on going like this, you'll have yourself a beautiful community of kind people supporting each other through their hard times. This is the most important thing in my opinion.
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Imagery: Neutral
- I feel like I shouldn't write anything here since this is a book of real life situations where imagination has no place.
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Overall: I think your book is really good, and just needs some editing xx.
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