Title: Let Me Hear You Speak

Author/Username: booknerd54321

Description:

I want to say somethingI just cant Not when the entire school thinks your weird-----Rose Lawrence hasn't spoken a word since she was eight years old. Her older sister Lily tries to get her to talk or at least communicate in some way,but Rose doesn't want to. Then one day after seven years of silence a kid named Max Fisher comes along and asks about the math homework. Rose shrugs this off as a one time thing, but Max is determined to get her to speak. Will Rose be able to keep silent or will she give in to the efforts of Lily and Max?

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In this review, there will be subjective and objective responses. If you see the word I or me anywhere in it, that is considered a subjective response.

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Cover:

Upon first glance, the cover is quite dark. The font color, a dark blue does not help with the overall darkness of the cover. Although it is quite obvious what the author was trying to achieve with the use of dark tones in the cover to match the sad and melancholy feeling of the book, it wasn't quite reached.

I feel that there are various ways to improve the cover, but the author/cover designer is on the right track. If a lighter color would have been used against the dark background, such as white, then the title would stand out.

Ways to improve covers matching books is to look at those in the same genre. If the book is a horror novel, look at the Horror Tag here on Wattpad and take from what you see. If it is a Teen Fiction, one with a sad tone such as yours, make sure that the cover stands out amongst the others.

There are tons of cover designers on this website, including myself, that would be able to guide you in the right direction.

Overall, the cover does need work, and may be one of the smaller reasons the book hasn't received the attention it deserves.

Description:

As a description person myself, I find that a lot of books on Wattpad don't really bring in the people viewing and going through the millions of books on the website/app.

Looking at yours from an objective view, I find it a little on the cliche side. Now, this is not a bad thing, it only means that most people on Wattpad tend to over describe, under describe, or fail to describe works in an intriguing way.

An example of a striking and outstanding description;

"I want to say something. One word. One syllable. But I can't, not when I can barely make it through school unscathed (untouched) as it is."

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"Eight years ago, Rose Lawrence stopped speaking.

One day, after seven years of silence, Max Fisher alters Rose's vow of silence.

Determined to find the reason behind her silence, Max searches for a way to break Rose until she finally speaks.

With the prompting and encouragement of her older sister, Rose finds herself starting to give in.

But sometimes one spoken word is a millions others wanting to escape."

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You want something intriguing, you want your book, including the description, to stand out from the rest.

The current description of the story isn't bad, not in the least, but a great way to attract readers is to have an intriguing description since it is the first thing, aside from the cover, that they see.

Dialogue:

The one, and pretty much only, problem I see within the dialogue is where it's located. What I mean by this, is when someone speaks, it is not moved to a new paragraph. An example of the correct uses of dialogue is below.

1.) "I can't breathe," he took my hands in his own, "I can't breath without you here."

2.) I hesitated, the last thread of my heart starting to unwind, "You should have said this when I was still alive, Henry."

3.) There was a silence, an unbearable one before he broke through the thin screen separating us and pulled me into his warm embrace, the beat of his heart slowly fading until there was nothing left.

"No!" I exclaimed, trying to push him out, "Henry, you're going to die. Go! Get out!"

I was too late. The color drained from his face, one last breath escaped him. This was it, my ex boyfriend, my everything. The only thing I had to hold on to from my past life.

Now he was nothing more than another one of the victims I'd have to add to my list.

With a shaky breath, I leaned down and shut his eyelids, "I'm so sorry."

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When writing dialogue, be sure to also acknowledge who is speaking. If it is your main character, and the book is first person, use "I said" "I choked out" "I cried" and "he said" "she spoke up" when talking about someone else.

Overall

Overall the book has incredible potential. With the help of some amazing editing and cover makers, your book is well on its way to finally showing its true potential through the little things that had started to add up.

As of now, I give it a 6 1/2 out of 10, with a lot of room for improvement that will surely be brought to it.

Don't be discouraged, the book is great and will be a winner with only a few minor adjustments. Never give up on writing, or any of your dreams for that matter. What nobody says matters unless you, as the author, allow it to.

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Thanks for requesting! Happy editing and improving!

~ChasingMadness24