"Shadow Rise"
by
solidarity_

Title- 8/10

The title suits the genre of the story very well. It gives insight and clues into what is coming within the story. It's simple but informative. I like it.

Cover-3/5

I'm a big fan of Robbie Amell so obviously the cover is appealing to me. I'm just not sure I like the colour combination, I think it might be a little too bright. But all the other elements within the cover works well.

Blurb-4/5

I love the blurb! It's short and sweet but at the same time, captures the reader's attention! I can also see a lot of the book's personality within it, which is great!

Plot (so far)-7/10

The story is still in it's early stages which is why I changed the mark allocation for this section. At the moment, the plot is just starting to unfold. Everything is very mysterious and there's a lot of anticipation! I like what I've seen so far!

Characters-17/20

Wow! I love your characterization. First of all it's so unique for a woman to write from a male's perspective on Wattpad and you have done such a great job of it!

The characters are an authentic display of reality so far and they are relevant to their social political climate that they are facing. My only critique is to maybe create a little more variety within your characters as a lot of them do seem similar to one another.

Grammar and Spelling- 19/ 20

I am so impressed! There are barely any errors within this book. I can tell you've worked very hard on editing the work that you produce!

Writing Style-9/10

The writing style is great and works well with the story. The descriptions are painted beautifully and thoroughly with an equal balance between show and tell.

The only critique that I have is that the use of breaks within the story become a little extreme. It interrupts the flow of the writing because it's happening so frequently. Maybe work on creating a smooth flow between the events instead of simply breaking the action with ellipsis.

Originality-8/10

This story is very original! I love how the beginning of your story introduces  the action and then interrupts it to create suspense! Everything about the story is immensely individual and it's wonderful!

I also HAVE to mention the Guide and Terminology chapters. All the graphics and symbols that you created are wonderful! I absolutely LOVE how thoroughly you've thought this world through and all the effort that you've put in to create its own unique and individual environment.

Overall Intrigue 8/10

I am so curious to see how you're going to tie in those monsters and creatures in the terminology to the story! Can't wait!