"To Love"
TheDreamChronicles

Title- 9/10

Like I said, the short and sweet titles that link throughout the books series. Each title gives clues as to what the story will be about, without giving too much information and it works very well.

Cover-4/5

The cover works well. Each cover connects to the theme of the book in the series. It's clear and eye catching.

Blurb-3/5

I really like how you've added in an extract from the book to capture the readers attention!

I do think the rest of the blurb needs a little work in terms of captivating the audience. I think in these cases the reader is looking for short and sweet. It seems a little long and the sentences tend to drag.

Plot-19/20

I think the plot development is a lot faster and clearer in this book and that's what makes it so appealing to the reader. The plot is great! It's well thought through, the pace is working well, and it's filled with twists.

I also have to just congratulate you on your magnificent prologue! It really is amazing!

Characters-19/20

"635202"

I like 635202 a lot and I like the contrast between her and Ambert. Her character has so much potential to grow throughout the story and you've done a lovely job of showing her development.

From the beginning, even though she's incredibly hard and aggressive, the audience still connects with her and feels sympathetic towards her situation. I think it's particularly hard to capture something like that in these types of characters and you've done a great job!

Ambert

Once again, I'm a big fan of Ambert (have been since book one). He's very unique and stubborn. You've worked well to development him and one sees his growth throughout this book.

Overall

The second book focuses a lot more on the relationship between characters which is great! For example, the trio between  Zolona, Sage and Raven and the competitive nature between them. It's a very interesting dynamic and from the beginning, we know that Raven isn't clued in on everything. It makes the story seem natural and relatable. Your characters are also a lot more diverse than in the first book which livens up the story.

Grammar and Spelling- 19/20

Once again, there are a few errors but nothing too distracting and they can be easily corrected with editing.

Writing Style-4/5

The dialogue seems to flow a lot more smoothly in this book. The interaction between characters is so much more believable and natural.

My main critique is that there isn't enough description within the environment as the story progresses.

Obviously within your prologue, you've introduced the world beautifully, but the lack of description seems to show as the story goes on and a lot of things are left up to the readers imagination.

Also, something that bothered me is the way in which 635202 listened in on the Dustin, Elizabeth, Ambert and Arvin's conversations. It just seemed a little distant from the main character. Maybe include 635202's personal feelings more within what is being said so that the dialogue doesn't simply shift from them to her. 

Originality-3/5

I think some of the elements of the story are a little familiar compared other fantasy novels, however, the story overall has a very original environment and setting.

There are a lot of a little elements that you've created to make this story special (Integrity the gun, Valentine, The Mark). All these elements give the story individuality and make the world more relatable since they've been so well thought through. They definitely don't go unnoticed!

Overall Intrigue 4/5

The story is great! There's action, romance and twists. I definitely recommend this book if you're a fan of the fantasy genre!