TheDreamChronicles 

"To Dream"

Title 7/10

The title is very successful. It's simple but intriguing. I also like how you've connected the titles throughout the whole series. 

Cover-4/5

All the covers for the series are amazing! I love the element of magic, colour and hope within it. It works well and fits with the storyline.

Blurb-3/5

The blurb is good but it could use some work. The beginning is punchy and interesting but I do feel it does lack an "it" factor towards the end. Maybe try shorter questions for intrigue.

Plot-18/20

The pace of how the story develops works very well. It's not rushed and it gives time for the reader to gain a clear understanding of the story.

The plot itself is also well developed and thought through. Everything falls together and you constantly leave the reader with questions.

Characters-16/20

Calista

I like how you've developed Calista. The process of her development is very interesting. She starts off very shy and timid and the rebelliousness within her thoughts gives the reader clues into her character's inner inner struggle.

I also love Calista's dreams! You can play with them even more in the beginning and make them bigger. It'll emphasize the dream's importance in the story more. They're very clever and honestly my favourite part.

Jake

I like the concept of Jake's character but he needs more masculinity. Some of his dialogue can be a bit unrealistic and this detracts from the believability of the character.

Overall

I do think you need to work on developing the closeness between characters, especially Jake and Calista. Don't force the relationship, let it build naturally. I think this particularly plays into the dialogue. Sometimes the language seems a bit distant and this makes it harder to connect with the characters.

Grammar and Spelling- 19/20

There are few grammatical errors ever-so-often but overall it's very well edited! Well done!

Writing Style-4/5

I like the formal nature of the writing style in the context of the story. It shows the lack of creativity in the society . I do think there's a little too much dialogue and it could use a bit more variation between this and descriptive language.

There could definitely be more description with regards to the surroundings in the story. The space that story takes place in, has a very big role in making the reader feel comfortable with the story and the environment.

Originality-3/5

The story is very 1984 meets The Giver. What makes it unique is the element of magic with the "dreamers" and Calista that you've integrated into the story which is refreshing.

Overall Intrigue 4/5

The story really does pull the reader in! I constantly found myself wanting to know what would happen next. I do think that you can develop a closer bond between the characters so that the reader can further identify with them but the story is very good!
A very successful novel!

Total: 78/100