🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title fits the story, however, the font you used on Wattpad for it is kinda hard to read. Also, "is" shouldn't be capitalized in the title. The cover is alright, it doesn't really attract readers. The text is a little hard to read because of the texture on the background. The blurb is alright, it's pretty short. It introduces the story a bit, however, it doesn't really introduce the characters.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story is clear and engaging. The exposition introduces the characters and the world very well. It also introduces Y/n's situation well. I don't think you ever mention what exactly is wrong with her brother though. What sickness does he have? Why are the treatments so expensive? I know that's not the focus of the story, but it would help develop Y/n's character is the readers knew. At the beginning, maybe add in a scene of her with her brother in the hospital after the doctor tells her the treatments are needed and how expensive they are. She basically raised him so show the emotion of her seeing him sick in the hospital. It also helps show the readers how desperate she is to get the money and help him get better. The flashbacks in the story are good and help develop the characters, however, there are a lot of them included in the story.

🔪》Characters

The characters were introduced and described well. Their personalities were also shown well throughout the chapters. As mentioned in the plot section, develop Y/n's relationship with her brother more. It'll help the readers better understand why she would agree to Geto's contract. Y/n and Geto's relationship is developing well in the story.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

There were a few spelling and grammar errors throughout the chapters.

Make sure to start a new paragraph when a new character is talking.

For example, you have this part in chapter 5.2:

"Kento, did Shoko make you do that...?" Geto asked. "Yes, and no," Nanami replied.

"How'd you all know it was my birthday today...?" I asked. "Suguru told us!!" Shoko said as she raised me like one does a pet cat or a sack of flour.

It should be like this:

"Kento, did Shoko make you do that...?" Geto asked.

"Yes, and no," Nanami replied.

"How'd you all know it was my birthday today...?" I asked.

"Suguru told us!!" Shoko said as she raised me like one does a pet cat or a sack of flour.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style is consistent throughout the chapters and it's well done! You do an excellent job working information and descriptions into the story. The chapters are a good length as well. The "part one" and "part two" labelling on the chapters isn't needed. Label the chapters one, two, three, and so on. The transition into the flashbacks is well done, however, it does take a second to realize the story has transitioned into a flashback. I suggest formatting the flashback scenes differently, like italicizing them, so it's clearer it's a flashback scene.

🔪》Enjoyment

The story was enjoyable and I would definitely read on! I don't know anything about this anime or manga, however, I was never lost or confused while reading. Everything was easy to understand. The plot drew me in and I want to see what happens as it progresses.

🔪》Overall

Overall, it was a very enjoyable read! The plot is intriguing and draws the readers in. I suggest spreading out the flashback scenes a bit since there are many of them right now. I also suggest formatting them differently than the rest of the story so it's clearer to the readers when a flashback starts. The characters are well done! Their personalities are shown very well throughout the chapters. As mentioned, develop the relationship between Y/n and her brother more. The writing style is very well done! Information and descriptions are worked into the story well. Actions and events are also described to the readers well. Good luck with your story!