🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title is interesting and attracts readers to the story. It does make it seem like a paranormal story though. The cover is alright, it doesn't really attract readers. The colors don't go well together and it doesn't seem like a rom-com cover. The title is also close to the model's face on the cover. The blurb introduces the plot and main characters of the story well. It also draws readers in and makes them want to read the story.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story is clear and engaging. The readers are drawn into the plot and the story makes them want to keep reading. The mystery is portrayed well and it keeps the readers interested. The plot of the story is progressing at a nice pace as well. The exposition introduces the characters, their situations, and the world well. I think the prologue helped set the story up as well.

🔪》Characters

The characters are introduced well, however, they could be described more. The characters' appearances aren't described much in the story. The characters' personalities are shown well throughout the chapters. The relationships between the characters are also shown well. Aleesha and Hreedhan are so cute! I also enjoyed the banter between Hreedhan and Yara.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

I didn't notice any spelling errors, however, there were a lot of grammar errors in the chapters.

Be aware of the spacing before and after punctuation. There was a lot of spacing used that shouldn't have been.

For example, you have this part in chapter 1:

"Oh yeah , do you know how heavy this suitcase is ?! " I shot back with narrowed eyes.

" Can't imagine " He muttered , rolling his eyes and switching his duffel bag to his other arm and lifting up my suitcase with his now free hand.

It should be like this (I also edited this a bit):

"Oh yeah, do you know how heavy this suitcase is?!" I shot back with narrowed eyes.

"Can't imagine," he muttered, rolling his eyes and switching his duffel bag to his other arm and lifting my suitcase with his now free hand.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style is consistent throughout the chapters, however, it needs some work. The setting is described very well. It was very easy to picture the locations they visited during their excursions. As mentioned, the characters aren't described much in the story. Be sure to include and work in descriptions of them as well. The chapters were a good length and they helped the progression of the story. Some of the phrasing was a little awkward as well. I was able to understand it, it just could have been phrased smoother.

🔪》Enjoyment

The story was enjoyable and I would read on! I want to see the moment when Yara and Sehar actually meet the boy next store. I also would like to see how the story progresses and what ends up happening.

🔪》Overall

Overall, it was a very enjoyable read! The mystery and the plot draw readers in and keep them engaged. The plot is progressing at a nice pace as well. The characters are also interesting and very likeable. I enjoyed the interactions between them! They added a lot of fun and levity to the story. Make sure to add in descriptions of the characters' appearances though. The setting was described very well in the story. It was very easy for the readers to picture themselves at the locations. Some of the phrasing could be smoother as well. Good luck with your story!