Judge: slayyer777➶-͙˚ ༘✶

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Third prize winner

The Mysterious Fan, RedRoseFicz

1. Cover/Title (5 pts):
The title, *"The Mysterious Fan," sparks intrigue and hints at suspense or a central, enigmatic object or concept. However, it’s not particularly evocative or specific, leaving readers guessing about the story’s focus. The cover is really good and it captures the mysterious vibe suggested by the title. 
Score: 3/5 

2. Writing Style (20 pts):
The writing style is descriptive and poetic, with imagery like "the darkness spread endlessly, like a piece of taut leather." However, the prose can be overly abstract, making it difficult for readers to grasp the scene or connect emotionally. Adding a balance between metaphorical and straightforward language would enhance readability and impact. 
Score: 15/20

3. Plot and Structure (20 pts):
From the excerpt, the plot is unclear, but the scene evokes a sense of alienation and mystery. While this creates an atmosphere, it lacks enough grounding in the excerpt to show direction or conflict, leaving the reader with questions rather than engagement. 
Score: 13/20 

4. Character Development (20 pts):
The protagonist’s internal perspective is intriguing, but there’s little context for their motivations or emotions beyond the vague sense of alienation. Further elaboration on Y/N’s relationship with the city or specific memories would make the character more relatable and layered. 
Score:12/20

5. Originality (20 pts):
The excerpt conveys an atmospheric tone, but the concept of a city feeling alien and estranged is a common trope in reflective narratives. The originality will likely depend on how the "mysterious fan" ties into the story, but from the excerpt, this unique element is missing. 
Score: 12/20 

6. Grammar (5 pts):
The grammar is strong, with no noticeable errors in the excerpt. The sentence structure is varied and effective for the reflective tone. 
Score: 5/5

7. Pacing (10 pts):
The pacing is deliberate and reflective, appropriate for setting up an atmospheric scene. However, it risks losing the reader’s attention if the narrative doesn’t soon provide more concrete details or action. 
Score:7/10 

Total: 67/100 ➶**

Overall Feedback:
"The Mysterious Fan" creates an evocative and atmospheric scene, drawing readers into a reflective, mysterious tone. While the writing style is poetic and imaginative, it leans heavily on abstract imagery, which can obscure the narrative’s direction and make it harder to connect with the protagonist. Focusing on grounding the story in specific details and introducing clearer stakes or conflict would greatly enhance its appeal. The title’s mystery is intriguing but could benefit from stronger connections to the story's unique element

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Second prize winner

The Face He Fell For, deadofwrite12-_-

1. Cover/Title (5 pts):
The title "The Face He Fell For" immediately suggests a central romantic element, contrasting with the dark underworld tone described in the writing. This juxtaposition is intriguing and adds depth. I like this cover, and it also really matches with the title.
Score: 4/5 

2. Writing Style (20 pts):
The writing is vivid and atmospheric, with strong imagery such as "a name whispered in fear echoed through the streets." The style effectively sets the tone for a dark, gritty romance. However, phrases like "heart colder than the winter winds" feel slightly clichéd and could be refreshed for greater impact. 
Score:17/20 

3. Plot and Structure (20 pts):
The excerpt suggests a plot rooted in themes of power, fear, and potential vulnerability (likely through love). While it’s a strong setup, it leans heavily on mafia tropes without immediately introducing a unique twist or conflict to distinguish it. The narrative structure seems solid but would need more context to assess fully. 
Score:15/20

4. Character Development (20 pts):
Jeon Jungkook is introduced as a fearsome, dominant figure, but his complexity isn’t fully revealed in this excerpt. The title hints at vulnerability through romance, which promises growth potential. Providing glimpses of his internal conflict or the face he’s destined to fall for would deepen the intrigue. 
Score:14/20 

5. Originality (20 pts):
The story draws on familiar mafia-romance tropes, which are popular in fanfiction but not particularly unique. The contrast between a cold-hearted mafia king and the romantic promise in the title is compelling, but a fresh angle or twist would elevate its originality. 
Score:13/20

6. Grammar (5 pts):
The grammar is strong, with no noticeable errors in the excerpt. The sentence structure effectively conveys the tension and atmosphere. 
Score: 5/5 

7. Pacing (10 pts): 
The pacing is deliberate and sets up the underworld atmosphere well. However, the excerpt could benefit from a quicker hint at the central conflict or romantic element to immediately hook the reader. 
Score: 8/10

Total: 75/100 ➶**

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Overall Feedback:
"The Face He Fell For" establishes a gripping and dark tone, introducing readers to a powerful and fearsome protagonist in Jeon Jungkook. The vivid imagery effectively sets the stage for a mafia romance, though some elements feel slightly overused within the genre. Highlighting a unique twist or giving an early glimpse of Jungkook’s vulnerability or his love interest would make the story more distinctive. The title and tone promise an emotional, tension-filled narrative, with strong potential for development.

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First Prize winner

"Meet Me At Midnight"
SSears90

1. Cover/Title (5 pts):
The title *"Meet Me At Midnight"* is alluring and mysterious, evoking images of late-night encounters and secrets. It complements the supernatural theme hinted at in the writing. The cover is also really attractive and eye-catching, especially jk eating grapes gives vampire vibes because of his expression.
Score: 5/5 

2. Writing Style (20 pts): 
The writing style is direct and vivid, immediately plunging the reader into the action with dynamic imagery like *"licked the blood off his chin as it dripped from his fangs."* It effectively conveys Jungkook's primal nature and the intensity of the scene. However, it could benefit from a bit more atmospheric detail to enrich the setting and heighten the tension. 
**Score:16/20

4. Character Development (20 pts):
Jungkook’s primal instincts and vampire nature are vividly depicted in this short excerpt, establishing a strong foundation for his character. However, the focus is primarily on his thirst, leaving little insight into his personality, motivations, or internal struggle. Expanding on his thoughts or emotions would add depth. 
Score: 15/20 

5. Originality (20 pts):
The concept of a vampire protagonist is a well-trodden path, especially in supernatural romance or drama. While the execution is engaging, the premise of a vampire craving blood and rushing through the city lacks a unique twist to make it stand out. A fresh element—like a forbidden romance, a moral dilemma, or an unusual setting—could elevate its originality. 
**Score:13/20

6. Grammar (5 pts):
The grammar is clean and polished, with no noticeable errors or awkward phrasing. The sentences flow smoothly, maintaining the intensity of the scene. 
**Score: 5/5 

7. Pacing (10 pts):
The pacing is fast and intense, matching the urgency of Jungkook’s bloodlust and the action-driven opening. While it works for this moment, the story could benefit from contrasting slower, reflective beats to balance the narrative. 
**Score: 8/10 

Total: 76/100 ➶

Overall Feedback:
"Meet Me At Midnight" sets an intense and vivid tone right from the start, plunging readers into a dark and thrilling world. Jungkook’s vampire nature is well-portrayed, creating a compelling hook. However, the excerpt could benefit from more atmospheric detail and a hint of deeper conflict or stakes to draw readers further into the story. The title is intriguing and fits the supernatural genre well, but the narrative could use a unique twist to set it apart from similar vampire tales.

Congratulations!

!This Judge has given a long review,. That's why I didn't reduce anything by appreciating her effort. But don't expect a long review from every judge, as the long review is only given to the first prize
holder. The Judges have to be careful from next time onwards!

Thank you!❤️