Poppiris

- Reviewer Moni -

Cover: 8/10

The cover was honestly quite pretty. The background was bright and eye-catching. However, the font was kind of bland. It sort of blended in with everything. Just a border around it with a shadow would make it better.

Title: 2 / 5

The title and the concept of the story was taken from one by the most famous writer in literature, William Shakespeare. So, I have nothing to say really. It's completely fine to take ideas from another story and as you have given credit, I wouldn't give any harsh remarks.

Blurb: 8/10

The blurb was small but doable. I wouldn't ask for you to change anything, other than to add a bit more about the characters or more dialogues of the stories. Aside from that, it was alright.

Plots and twists: 19/25

Again, I don't have much to say about the plots and twists, as it is mostly based off of another story. But I have nothing against it either!

Characters and emotions: 13/15

The characters were nicely aligned, if I say so myself. But, I feel like the emotions could've been elaborated more.

For example, here:

" He hugged Jungkook tighter as if he never wanted to let him go. "

Could've been -

"He hugged Jungkook tighter, keeping him close in his embrace ; not wanting to let go of the love of his life."

Some bigger words and more description can really add more depth to emotions.

Writing style: 12/15

The writing style is pretty standard. Although, I'd say, if you work on your vocabulary more; it could be much better.

Grammar and vocabulary: 15/20

The grammar was fine and so was the vocabulary. But, I feel like more should've been added to the vocabulary. More words in certain expressing parts of the story would be better.

Reviewer's thoughts: Overall, I think this story has a lot of potential. However, some improvements are needed. I hope my judging didn't discourage you! I just want to help you improve your work. Good luck ahead!

Total:: 77/100

Strengths:: I feel like your strengths are more when it comes to the alignment. For instance, how and where there are gaps between the paragraphs. Don't get me wrong, this too is quite important in my opinion.

Weaknesses: I feel like your weaknesses lie in punctuation. No matter where you're getting your ideas or writing style from, punctuations should always be on point. Try adding more commas in sentences to add sort of a pause in them, it makes it look better. Use my punctuation in this review as an example!

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