🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title fits the story and it's capitalized correctly, however, it is a little long though. The cover is alright, it's kinda plain. It kinda reminds me of the covers for the Penguin classics. I suggest making "If You Are Gone" bigger on the cover since that seems like the book's title while "The Legacy of Jane" seems more like the series title. The blurb introduces the plot and the characters well. It definitely draws readers in and makes them want to read the story.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story is clear, however, it isn't very engaging. It's a little boring at the moment. It feels like the readers are being told what's happening and the events aren't being expanded upon much. Show more of how the events are effecting the girls and the emotions. The exposition introduces the characters and their world well. The pacing of the story is good. However, I do wish we had gotten to know their parents better and see more normalcy before their parents vanished.

🔪》Characters

The characters are introduced and described well. The descriptions were worked into the story well. The characters' personalities were also shown well throughout the chapters. The relationship between the sisters is also shown well. It's clear how much they care about one another and how close they are. As mentioned, I wish their parents had been show more so the readers could have gotten to know them before they disappeared.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

I noticed a few spelling and grammar errors, but nothing major. In the first chapter, Hellen's name is spelled with two Ls and in the sixth chapter it's spelled with only one.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style is alright, however, it needs some work. Descriptions and information are worked into the story well. More descriptions could be added though or the characters as well as the scenery. Make sure you're showing the readers what's happening instead of telling them. Show the girls' emotions about their parents' disappearance through their actions and dialogue.

🔪》Enjoyment

The premise of the story is interesting and I do like the historical elements. I don't know if I would read on though. As I mentioned, the plot is a little boring at the moment. I do want to see what happens to the girls though and see what happens if they find their parents.

🔪》Overall

Overall, the premise of the story as well as the mystery are interesting, however, the plot needs to be developed better. The plot is progressing at a nice pace, but the events aren't really delved into. Be sure to show the readers what's happening instead of telling them. Expand on the events and show how they're effecting the girls instead of telling the readers. The descriptions you used in the story were done well, but more could be added. Good luck with your story!