"But all that I know is that I need you close."

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starkith
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Let's get into it!

☁first impressions (23.5/25): The cover font is really nice. It's very professional and neat. However, I'm not sure if I really like the cover image so much, since it's off-centered while the title is still in the middle. I'm not a huge fan of all-yellow either, but that's just a personal thing so I'm not taking points off for that. The description is pretty good, with a quote and a nice synopsis. I also like the review quotes part... I actually haven't seen that on Wattpad before, so kudos to you! Finally, the title is pretty original. I don't think I've seen a BTS fanfiction with that name before. Awesome job overall!

☁grammar & sentence structure (12.5/15): The grammar is pretty spot-on in most places, save for a few needed commas and places that shouldn't be capitalized, (the words right after a piece of dialogue should be lowercase) but nothing that jumps out at me. I'm really glad you didn't have a lot of grammar mistakes because it shows how much time and effort you put into the story. However, I think you can maybe vary your sentence structure just a bit. Put prepositional phrases at the beginning of the sentence, and more compound sentences as well. Also, I wanted to mention your dialogue a little bit here. It's a bit stiff from what I could tell, and I think you should read the dialogue out loud as if you're saying it in real life, then tweak it. Lastly, tenses are very important. I noticed you switch past and present, and I totally get that it can be really hard to keep track of those! Hell, even I get it mixed up sometimes. I would just go through with a copy edit and fix all of those things. Super great overall!

☁plot (26/30): It's a bit standard, and I've seen the storyline before, but I think the way you wrote it makes me connect with it so much that it almost doesn't matter. The characters made such a simple plot come alive, and the plot being so simple actually made it better for them to shine. The writing style also supported the simplistic plot. You really made it unique because of how well you wrote the characters and their connections to each other. I think it was a bit rushed at the end, however. I wanted to know how each of them felt when Namjoon told Neena that he was leaving. I saw a lot of dialogue, but not a lot of description. You should add more descriptions to buff it out, because I thought I was running a marathon or something around chapter 12 lol. Don't be afraid to write longer chapters!

☁characters (18.5/20): I found them very realistic. I felt like Neena's character was a bit stereotypical, (sad girl, angst, finds way out with guy, etc.) but the way she changed throughout the story due to Namjoon's help was really special to see. Oh, and NAMJOON! I love how he's damaged and needs help, too. A lot of times, I see the girl needing help but not the man, 'cause you know, men are big and strong and don't need emotional help EVER apparently. I really loved how he was soft-spoken and was so patient throughout the whole thing. I feel like these types of stories where the characters drive the plot rather than the plot driving character are so underrated, but to me, they're so special. You don't need a bonkers plot and a unique storyline with each and everything you read because sometimes that's not what life is about, and I think you captured real life very well. I can feel the characters' emotions, and you made me care about fictional people after only 15 chapters, which is crazy. I give you major kudos for that.

☁writing style (18.5/20): The writing style fit so perfectly for this story! It was descriptive, yet not TOO descriptive, and really paid attention to the inner thoughts of the characters. You reflect the mood of the story perfectly. If it were super spunky writing like a lot of contemporary literature out there, it would not have fit at all, but you definitely know what you're doing! I believe you're a very gifted writer. Like I said before, you should make use of more compound sentences in some parts to avoid awkwardness and avoid repetitiveness of using the same words over and over, (work on diction) but other than that, everything is fantastic!

☁flow (9.5/10): The flow was perfect. I don't have any complaints or comments... Each chapter was a decent length, the prose flowed super well, etc. The one thing I might say (you don't have to change this because it's really not a big deal) is to divide those huge paragraphs up. I see a ton of that in this book, and sometimes I felt like I was scanning the pages. But it's really not a big deal like I said, so it's fine!

☁total score: 108.5/120 or 90.4%!

The coolest of beans!

☁optional advice nook: Light copy edit: look for tense changes, stiff dialogue, and vary sentence structure by using more compound sentences and mixing up the structure of some sentences to make it flow. Get rid of repetitive words. Divide paragraphs a bit in the chunky spots.

☁song nook: Here are some songs I thought of while reading this! I was definitely thinking of angst, the feelings of both Neena and Namjoon throughout the story, and DEFINITELY thinking of rm's album... Let me know what you think!

♔badbye by RM & eAeon♔
(like... obviously)

♔needy by Ariana Grande♔

♔no tears left to cry by Ariana Grande♔

♔Lover of Mine by 5SOS♔

♔Dimelo by KARD♔

☁summary: This was a very enjoyable read, and for those who want a classic plot with overall good writing and relatable characters. Your writing style fits so well for this type of story, and the plot and characters really drove that home for me. I've read the story before, but reading it again was such a pleasure, and I'm so excited to read all of your books at some point!

Aaaand... that's it for the review! Comments, questions, concerns, please let me know. I'm so friggin sorry this review took forever. I was so preoccupied with other hobbies that I was writing this review so slowly... I hope I can get back on a schedule to come out with them faster from now on! Have a great day, everyone!

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