Review by : Tae-s-bear

Author of the book ivna_jung

Title :: 2/10

It is not at all attractive or unique to be used as a title. Try to give compact and eye-catching titles as in Wattpad books are mostly judged by titles, covers and description.

Cover :: 4/10

It looked more magical and not also matching with the plot. The background of the cover is too bright. Try to choose pictures in accordance with the concept of the book.

Description :: 1/10

Just a gist of the whole story, it  is not equal to the description. You need to portray the story in such a way which will make the readers curious about the book. You need to add more things to entertain the readers to read your book.

Pace :: 3/10

Some places were very fast. You need to take time while writing a story and think where explanation is important.

Concept and plot :: 4/10

A very uncommon plot was chosen to write but the way it is written is not really good. It is lacking interest. You need to add more entertaining sub stories. Many of the things were left to explain.

Characters Development :: 3/10

As a reader, I felt there is a need to explain the characters more and give others pov too other than only giving the main lead's pov.

Grammar and Vocabulary :: 2/10

So many typing errors are there is the whole story. Try to reread once before publishing it. Use new words in the story to make it look more professional.

Writing style ::1/10

"Bullies of bully" does not have any meaning, "Mrs Lee is a very rich woman" is still very fictional. How can a person just being a secretary can have those things mentioned in the story? It's very fictitious to relate.

Referring "BTS '' to a group of boys is very irrational. Here they are adopted sons of one the character, how can you give a whole band name to them? And if you want to give that name then mention the reason. "Blackpink '' group too felt very irrational to me. Referring to them with their group name is very unmatchable with the plot.
              
So many pictures were added unnecessarily, instead of that you may have spent some time in defining some situations as it is lacking. The whole book is filled with only conversation, try to explain other characters' emotions, situation change, place definition etc.

Overall impression :: 1/10

Due to so much conversation and lacking of explanation, as a reader I felt zero interest in the story at some point of time. You don't need to add every picture of the house. Just add whatever is included in the story and explain it later....if it's necessary.

Rating of the book :: 1/10
Total :: 22/100

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