Book: On The Land, In The Sea
Author: GiselleJaneZee
Reviewer: Iamjustasapien
Chapters read: 11

Cover:
The cover is simple but really beautiful. The colour contrast of Ezra and Heinry's attire is quite appealing. And background really fits the theme and storyline, good job on that! It does catch reader's attention, but I would like to give a suggestion.
The word " On the" on the cover is blurred and a bit small. I understand, it blurred due to sea-related theme, but I would suggest to not blur it or reduce the blur a little, as it is really hard for the reader to read it and make sure to increase the font size.  Apart from that, everything else is perfect!

Title:
"On the land, in the sea" is such a fitting and intriguing title choice! It really depicts the storyline well. It makes the reader want to click the story and explore more. Personally, this remained me of "The Little Mermaid". It is such a simple yet eye-catching title, good job!

Blurb:
"ɪ ᴋɴᴇᴡ ᴡᴇ ᴡᴇʀᴇ ᴅᴇꜱᴛɪɴᴇᴅ ᴀꜱ ꜱᴏᴏɴ ᴀꜱ ɪ ʟᴀɪᴅ ᴍʏ ᴇʏᴇꜱ ᴏɴ ʏᴏᴜ"
      ~𝓗𝓮𝓲𝓷𝓻𝔂 𝓓𝓮 𝓦𝓮𝓵𝓵𝓲𝓷𝓰𝓽𝓸𝓷
Is a pretty good start! Just a small suggestion. You can rephrase the sentence to something like this, for a better flow:
" I knew we were destined to be, as soon as I laid my eyes on you."

And there are quite a few other mistakes, which can be solved out if you proof-read it. It would be quite agonizing to read as I point other mistakes out. So, I humbly recommend the author to correct them. Apart from that, the blurb is really good, it hooks the reader, and ignites their curiosity to explore more as well. Awesome job on that!

Plot:
I have to admit, you did a awesome job on the world building and plot line. Hats off to that! The way you describe the kingdom of Azurethra is just jaw-dropping. It practically felt like a real world and not a world out of someone's imagination. And the pacing of the story is good too! Not to fast not too slow.  Excellent job! 

However, just a small recommendation, you could bold the places and names which are newly introduced. It has been done in a few places, but it would reading easier if you did that to the names of places as well. And there are quite a few mistakes in spellings, punctuations and sentence phrasing. For example:
"....and long,wavy vivid cerulean hairs stood infront of her father, King Thallaquin Aqualon II . "

You can't use three adjectives to describe hair, the flow of the sentence is ruined. So, I suggest to rule out one of the adjectives and rephrase the sentence to something like:
"...and long, wavy cerulean hair..."

And punctuation errors are there as well.

???: "Miss, isn't this too hard it will take almost one day to reach Solarnelle empire. While the king has asked you to bring the pearl before the dawn. Its just too impossible, isn't it?"

Can be written as: 
???: "Miss, isn't this too hard? It will take almost one day to reach Solarnelle empire, while the king has asked you to bring the pearl before the dawn! It's just  impossible, isn't it?"
There are many other mistakes as well, I suggest to proof-read your work and correct them. As a reader, I would naturally look for books with good punctuations and spellings, however, your book has quite a few errors which can be fixed. After all mistakes helps us grow more! This masterpiece just a needs a bit of polishing to outshine all! Keep writing!

Character development:
Well, the story hasn't progressed a lot, but I personally liked Coralia Aqualon, the second princess and Ezra. Their personalities really catched my attention. And I loved the fact that Ezra knows how to stand up for herself and speak out loud. And our Henzz is such a gentleman, I loved how you portrayed him. He is not those "spoiled rich brat" and respects Ezra. I just love how he changes his mood and nature around her. Hope he stays that way!

And Cain is the best side character in this story. He has such a fun and energetic personality! My personal favorite line is:  "Miss! Its bacon and toast topped with butter, I pray thy god that Master's Eagle go die in gutter."

Loved that fact you used a bit of Shakespeare's english, it really fits the historical theme of the plotline. Crown Prince Alexandro, was such a interesting character, I hope we get to know more about him the future!

Overall, the characters can be well distinguished due to their personalities and behavior and are well written! Good job!

Grammer and Vocabulary:
Well, I have already talked about it in the "plot" section. You need to correct the punctuation, spellings and sentences for a better experience to the readers. You have a really good potential to reach heights, but the smallest mistakes are holding you down. Fix them, so that this masterpiece can outshine all!

Improvements needed to be done:
Apart from the mistakes mentioned above, there is nothing to improve. Your story is perfect just the way it is! Never stop writing!

Overall enjoyment:
The story was really enjoyable! The imagery and words used are evocative. It hooks the reader, and has that spark every reader looks for. Just like I said: This masterpiece just a needs a bit of polishing to outshine all! Keep writing! Thank you!

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