005 Slate grey

by alpaljames 

TITLE- 5/5

Unique title, easy to catch attention of viewer

BLURB- 5/5

Amazing Blurb.

BEGINNING- 4/5 

GRAMMAR- 14/15 

WRITING STYLE- 10/10 

PLOT- 20/20 

SURROUNDINGS- 8/10 

CONTENT INSIDE- 10/10

PACE- 5/5

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT- 4/5 

TOTAL- 85/90

This horror story masterfully crafts tension and unease, drawing readers into a chilling world. The atmosphere is oppressive, with vivid descriptions that evoke a sense of dread. Character development is excellent, making the protagonists' fear and desperation palpable.

The pacing is well-balanced, accelerating towards a terrifying climax. The plot twists are unexpected yet logical, adding depth to the narrative.

To enhance the story, consider:

- Expanding on supporting characters' motivations

- Clarifying the mythology behind the horror elements

- Tightening transitions between scenes

Overall, this is a compelling, spine-tingling horror story that will captivate fans of the genre. I enjoyed your story you can work on your cover. If you need any help in it you can reach out to me.

006 Human light

by lilac_minded 

TITLE- 5/5

A catchy and funny title. I love it.

BLURB- 5/5

Well described Blurb

BEGINNING- 4/5

Amazing beginning

GRAMMAR- 15/15

WRITING STYLE- 9/10 

PLOT- 19/20 MARKS

SURROUNDINGS- 9/10 

CONTENT INSIDE- 10/10 

PACE- 4/5

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT

TOTAL- 84/90

This horror story effectively blends psychological terror and supernatural elements, creating a gripping narrative. The protagonist's descent into madness is skillfully portrayed, making their fear and paranoia palpable. The setting is atmospheric and foreboding, amplifying tension.

To further enhance the story, consider:

- Developing supporting characters beyond archetypes

- Clarifying the connection between the protagonist's past and present

- Refining pacing in the final act to maintain tension

Strengths:

- Unsettling atmosphere

- Well-crafted protagonist

- Chilling plot twists

Weaknesses:

- Predictable villain motivations

- Some plot threads feel underdeveloped

Overall, a compelling horror story with immense potential. I can truly see you have potential however your story is quite underrated. You should keep going.

007 Echo in the wind 

by strawberry1d 

TITLE- 5/5

The title was very apt.

BLURB- 2/5

The blurb had the element of putting the whole overview of the storyline together.

BEGINNING- 5/5

The beginning was very simply expressed, but had the intriguing effect in it.

GRAMMAR- 9/15

In grammar wise there are many areas, where things need to be corrected.

WRITING STYLE- 8/10

The author's way of expressing was simple yet expressive making it easy to understand without any difficulty. The idea of the surroundings was vivid and very nicely portrayed.

PLOT- 20/20

This fanfiction made me travel places, in the sense, it was so heartfelt that could very much evoke emotions in me. It was a unique one.

SURROUNDINGS- 8.5/10

Since this book had a reality along with horror parts aligned to it, it absolutely synchronized perfectly!

CONTENT INSIDE- 7.5/10

The content was engaging and had me hooked till the very end. Characters were gradually developed in their own pace which is praiseworthy here. Jungkook's character had some massive changes from a introvert to opening up to the female main character and the other dynamics changing between them and other characters as well.

PACE- 5/5

The pace was commendable. It was constant throughout the chapters.

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT- 5/5

The pace as already mentioned earlier, was commendable. I could feel the story happening in front of me, that good was the engagement!

TOTAL- 75/90

008 Zahn and klaue 

by Evolution-500 

TITLE- 1/5

The title wasn't catchy at all and it didn't give an idea of the story.

BLURB- 2/5

The blurb gave a vague idea of the storyline. It was neither too long or too short.

BEGINNING- 4/5

The beginning was a bit clumsy but it made sense once the first paragraph was over.

GRAMMAR- 10/15

Grammar-wise it was alright, no to less mistakes were seen.

WRITING STYLE- 6/10

The descriptions were amazing with the world-building just when it needed to be done, but the style could have been upgraded more to attract more readers from the very beginning.

PLOT- 14/20

The Plot felt common, it was talking about how AI can take control over the future which is a very common issue that is in debate nowadays. The topic is relevant but nothing unique or special plotwise. The Plot aligned with the blurb.

SURROUNDINGS- 5/10

It was easy to understand, the writing and the world-building being apt and congruent to the blurb. But could have been better.

CONTENT INSIDE- 4/10

Many a time, the chapters were very lengthy making it a monotonous read. The content was engaging at first but as time went on, it became boring. The Character developments were done nicely.

PACE- 3.5/5

The pace was moderate.

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT- 3.5/5

I enjoyed yet didn't enjoy this book. It was a medium-paced read.

TOTAL- 53/90