- Review For: To Kill Or Love -
misstalksalot2000 is the winner of the Mystery category of the Sunset Moon Awards. As per one of the prizes they gave me an option to focus on and give feedback. Again, congratulations on being the winner!
(opening)
I personally love the opening. It's attention grabbing and I can ultimately tell it's going to be a good book. We can already see the complicated relationship and the dilemma the main character is facing. It'll leave a good room for world building. I would keep it this way but one suggestion is that I would flip some things around.
For example, I would start like this:
My finger inches towards the trigger and pretend the bullseye is my boyfriends face.
Our relationship is complicated....
See, I just flipped some things around and connected some things. This is only me going into such small little details to make it perfect because I truly don't have any suggestions. I'm really picky when it comes to openings because I feel like they're so important, but you did an amazing job. Congratulations on winning again ❤️
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