Reviewer: Lily A_Tiger_Lily

Author : ithowxs337

Book : Rain on my soul

Blurb: ⅘

It was pretty long and good enough to catch my attention. The beautiful phrasal lines you used as dialogues really ate me up. It was beautiful indeed. However, I think maybe adding a little scene from the story might spice it up. You know, any scene which can spice the reader's attention more such as any thriller scene or any exciting dialogues. 

Title: ⅗

It's really unique and beautiful. This is well chosen. Usually the rain is taken as the sad and gloomy feeling which is healing to many and agony to others. I was amazed by your choice. The only marks I cut are the reader's attention. Usually, people don't come by seeing these titles. What I meant to say surely, suits the plot and the hidden meaning behind it. But it is not catchy enough to grab the reader's attention. If you consider the following suggestions, I would suggest you a few names. 

1- Hidden love
2- Paradise in your arms
3- Broken chains
4- Invisible hearts
5- Rain on my soul is still perfect. (Hehe)

Cover: ⅕

It gives off gloomy and anxious feelings. It does match the theme of the story but I personally think it is not good enough to catch the reader's attention. I don't think enough struggle is put upon this. You can add a few elements in your cover. Such as gloomy effects with scribbling lights. Pouring rains and drowsy state of characters? I am not good with graphics but I can detect which would look good. However, you can take services from any graphic shop. 

1st Impression: ⅘

If we count it from the very start which includes, title and blurb with cover. Then, the blurb really impressed me. The words you chose and the dialogues you wrote were really good and made me eager to read more. The last line you wrote and told us all as this being a confession, whether to be accepted or not, I wanted to read it. 

The first chapter really captivated me. The way you portrayed and gave the graphic description of the scene is not something, many are pro in. You put a great impression on me and I moved further. 

Reader's interaction: 8/10

This factor seemed satisfied. Readers are interacting with the story and characters. Telling and sharing their opinions and thoughts well. 

Plot: 7/10

If we talk about the cliché part then I am forced to say no. This didn't seem cliché to me. If it is then, I would like to say the technique and elements you used in the story made it enjoyable. A few factors or events seemed cliche such as the protagonist being alone or a quiet one with a sassy attitude which is not rare in skool luv affairs. However, the execution of the plot has forced me to say that the pace is too slow. 

I liked how you describe each and every factor and background with all the necessities but… Usually readers feel bored at this excessive amount of explanations. They want to read the interaction between main leads which is very few in your story. Hope you can consider this. 

Twist: 6/10

It's a simple plain story with no twist being called a major one. It was already predicted that the protagonist will fall in love with the other one sooner or later. People already predict this but normally read this type of ff to know which leads them to confess. The basic reason I read this story as well as many days ago before it was assigned to me for a review. At that time, I looked at it as a reader and felt quite the opposite of what I am saying today as a reviewer. 

As a reviewer. I must point out the lacking I felt there are and let you know about that. However, I don't think there are major twists in the way. The story's pace is too slow and already predicted the seven st taking place. 

What can you do to avoid this? 

Think of something unusual. Unusual which a man can't expect in this type of story. Such as facing a dilemma regarding love stories. It is not rare. But what is rare is that the Protagonist is already engaged and loves his fiance but sees the other main lead and now is in a dilemma.

Usually, writers choose abuse and bully stories or sometimes, forced to be married to your bully crush or something like that. Even though your story doesn't have any of those, it still lacks twists. 

However, it's my own suggestion. I know you have planned the whole book and plot.

Grammar: 8/10

You are pretty good with this factor. I don't seem to have any doubt over this. 

Emotions: 8/10

This factor is something I would love to talk about. You are really great at this and didn't leave me or anyone reading your story, unsatisfied. I amazingly felt each and every turn in the character's behavior and their emotions. I was made known to the inner conflicts of the characters. Good job. 

Character development: 6/10

As much as I have observed, the characters are changing but their pace is too low. Too low to be noticed obliviously. But it matches with the execution and pace you set to show your story so I have no objection at all. But still, I think it would be appreciated if you can speed it up a little.

Style: 8/10

I am totally impressed by your way of expressing the characters, background, emotions and all over the story. Usually writers don't focus on background and explanation. They just focus on the dialogues and the cliche lines of telling the event. But you have used such techniques to tell us about your story and beings in them, totally applause for that. 

Well done.

Overall: 7/10

Total: 73/100

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