Book: It was always you

Author: yxshi-

Reviewer: TuesdaysLeftovers

Please note that this review is only based on chapters (1-16) because of time constraints and/or it was updated after the review was written. Because of this, some aspects of this review may be incorrect or different as the review is not made considering the book as a whole. Thank you.

Description: 5/5

This description is basically perfect. Not only does it have a short and engaging teaser of the content of the book, but it also tells a short description of the main characters and their situation established at the beginning of the book.

Cover: 5/5

I love this cover, because not only is it simple, but it also showcases the two main characters, and insight into the kind of relationship they have with each other.

Title: 3/5

It might be because I have not read the whole book, but I do not really see how the title connects with the story. Despite this, the title is simple and more or less matches the cover.

First Impression: 4/5

When I first opened the first chapter, I was very intrigued. I noticed immediately that your writing style is very direct, which is quite simple, but from what I've seen it has been executed quite well.

Readers Interaction: 4/5

(Remember, the amount of readers and how much they interact with the book does not determine anything about the quality of a person's writing. Reader's interaction varies from many different things such as the writing style itself or amount of author's notes among other things.)

There are quite a few votes and comments meaning that your story is engaging.

Story Plot: 12/15

So far, I find the plot quite interesting, but there are a few parts of the plot that I find a bit questionable or confusing.

Here are some of my notes or questions about the plot in specific areas of the book:
-The pacing seems quite quick in the first few chapters of the book. It might be helpful to establish character relationships a bit more.
-I feel like it should be made very clear that Nick's band is very well known and popular. Bella's shock when she found out that the person she was moving in with was Nick left me very confused until I finally connected the dots that Nick is actually well-known.
-On the topic of being well-known, Nick does not get into any situations where his fame hinders him (an example would be fans constantly coming up to him or something of that caliber). When he goes out in public, he seems to be treated like a normal person which leads me to believe that he is not well known, but the fact that he is performing a concert for a huge audience gives the opposite impression.
-The solo dirty scene is really unexpected and does not really have much of a transition. (Ch. 3)
-The author's note near the end of chapter 4 more or less spoils the plot. (that Nick and Bella actually get together and have a really close relationship).
-Nick's reason for needing a housemate (his mother) is unclear and not explored enough for something that is a main plot point. It just seems like plot convenience.
-The encounter in chapter 8 between Reed and Bella is so short that it does not really establish what just happened and the severity of it.
-Nick's assertion that he knows that Bella was lying about her upset stomach doesn't seem very realistic. It just seems like plot convenience. (Ch. 9)
-While the little pictures with their names for perspective changes is creative, those reading offline won't be able to see them. Maybe add their name under them or something so that those reading offline wouldn't be confused.
-Don't people that work at hospitals wear uniforms? (Ch. 10)
-The end of chapter 11 states that Bella is not going to the concert, but Nick sees her in the crowd. Despite being explained at the beginning of chapter 12 on why she is there, it might be helpful to put that scene before Nick sees her at the concert to prevent the readers from getting confused.
-When did Nick put on a shirt? (Ch. 15)
-Was Bella even of legal age when she started working as a stripper? (Ch. 16) If not, how did she even get that job?
-Chapter sixteen is a really good volta of Nick's relationship and his view of Bella.

Plot Twist: 4/10

At this point of the story, I feel like the only thing that can be considered a plot twist would be Bella revealing her backstory and past. While it is pivotal to the book's flow and changes the dynamic of certain relationships, it wasn't alluded to pretty much at all before chapter sixteen. This makes it seem a bit like an afterthought.

Grammar: 9/10

Your grammar is very good and the only issues I have found would be that there are some instances of inconsistent use of punctuation.

Emotions and Feel: 8/10

This book is quite well in conveying the emotions of the characters to the readers.

Character Development: 7/10

Initially, I felt like most of the characters were very one-note, yet as the book progressed, the main characters developed in their own ways. I hope that the rest of the book continues to develop all of the characters.

Way Of Writing: 8/10

I really like how this book uses quite a direct tone, and how consistent it was. One thing I quite like is how Bella uses an abbreviation in the third paragraph of the first chapter in her thoughts, establishing the kind of casual tone her character uses.

Overall: 8/10

You are a very talented writer, and your book is a very good example of that. If I ever have time, I'd actually want to finish your book because of how interesting it was. Good job, you should be proud!

Total: 77/100

If you have any questions, need clarifications, or elaborations about what I wrote here in this review, feel free to ping me (@TuesdaysLeftovers) in a comment and ask, I'll try to answer as soon as possible. Thank you and have a nice day!