For @PurpleMoonDragon. Next oc will be Furypaw.

Name: Tawny Mist
(I'm not sure if she's supposed to be Tawny Mist or just Tawnymist, but I'm going to say it as 2 words. Please correct me if this is wrong tho :O)

This is a beautiful name. Tawny- is somewhat overused, but it's one of my favorites. -Mist is the same. I love how easy this name is to say, and it's really nice. I've seen it maybe one or two times.

Gender: she cat

Okay ;-;

Looks: She is black, orange, and grey with green eyes.

Would this be considered Tortoiseshell? Idk what color makes up Tortoiseshells, but I feel like that would be easier to say "Tortoiseshell" than "black, orange, and brown."

Also, why isn't she tawny? Ik Tawnypelt and Tawnyspots aren't really tawny either, but just bc the Erins messed up doesn't mean you should XD

Also, green eyes are overused, but at least they aren't blue..

Clan: Spirit Clan (from my story)

I don't really like things like Spirit, Soul, etc in the warriors. They seem too human-y, but I suppose that's alright.

Rank: Senior Warrior

Nice :3

Personality: She is a kind hearted she-cat almost all of the time. She gets very cruel and evil if you mess with her clan, family, and friends.

Well, she doesn't really have any flaws. Being mean to mean cats isn't really a flaw. Make her annoying, or nosy, or noisy, something like that. She doesn't have to be a mean cat, but I don't want her to be perfect either..

Backstory: Tawny was an only kit and once she left her mother she found an old house to live in. She grew more there and she ran into a tom, Pine. They saw each other almost everyday and fell in love, moved to a cave and has to tom kits together.

Well, I suppose this is alright. It's very short, and a lot of things are left out. For example, why did she leave her mother? Do all kits do that? Where does the Clan come in? I don't see any mention of SpiritClan. I'm confused. Is she a loner or a Clan cat..?

Mate: Pine Claw

Ok

Kits: Hawk and Eagle

Cute names. I like how they match. I also like bird names soo.

·~*OVERALL*~·
I'd give her like... 4/10? Sorry, but she could use some work. She doesn't have any flaws, her fur color doesn't really make sense with her name, and a lot of her backstory is left out. I don't mean to be mean, but.... You should fix her up a little.

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Name: Pine Claw

This is alright. Pine- isn't used too often, but I do see it a bit. -claw is overused, and pretty boring. This name I've seen quite a bit, so..

Gender: tom

:3

Looks: Brown tabby tom with Amber eyes

Very plain. Reminds me of Bramblestar. This appearance is used very often.

Clan: Spirit Clan (my book)

^^^

Rank: Senior Warrior

Ok

Personality: Good old country cat and is only mean when someone messes with his family.

I like the country cat thing. That's cute. But, like Tawny Mist, he doesn't have any flaws :/

Backstory: Pine had a sister named Maple but she was blind. He took care of her until a badger came and attacked them and she was killed. His home was destroyed so he tried to find a new one. He ran into Tawny and fell in love so they moved to a cave and had kits together.

I like this. It's sad. This isn't as confusing as Tawny Mist's, so that's good. I'd like to know how his home was destroyed, but other than that, this is alright.

Mate: Tawny Mist

Ok

Kits: Hawk and Eagle

^^^^

·~*OVERALL*~·
5/10. Even tho his appearance and name are a bit plain, I like his backstory, so good job on that. Pretty much the same thing as Tawny Mist; add flaws, a longer backstory, etc.

Thanks :D