. Yeah, I played dumb but I always knew
That you'd talk to her, maybe
did even worse .

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. YOUR RATING .

Cover- 4/5
The cover is BOMB! I love it so much. The reason why I gave it a 4 is because i thought maybe the cover should match with the color theme of your book if there is one??

Plot development 28/30
The plot is different, refreshing, and a great idea! I've seen many Sirius black daughter fics, but NEVER a Sirius black daughters fic? But I do recommend that don't make Lyra like one of those fan-fictions where the OC just becomes apart of the golden trio and doesn't have any original lines. Remember there is nothing wrong with being bffs with golden trio. JUST PLEASE MAKE LYRA BE HER OWN PERSON!  And maybe make Aqua have second thoughts about blood purity since she is befriending Blaise and Theo and the Sytherlins. That would be a good negative!

Character development and portrayal - 27/30
The portrayal is lovely. You can tell the character's personalities. And how different Aqua and Lyra are from each other! All I recommended for this is try and make the character's have a negative about themselves (mean, annoyed insecure, deal with trauma, or struggling with a self-problem etc.) and make the character develop throughout the story. That always help portrays the characters a bit better.

Pacing of story - 20/20
It's pretty nicely done. Nothing is rushed or being slowed down. I like that everything fits together!

Grammar - 15/15
The grammar is perfect! I did not see one misspelled word or a word that didn't make sense!

Overall; 48/50